Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban terdengar lebih alami dan efektif. Gunakan kalimat yang lengkap dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Misalnya, jelaskan secara jelas bagaimana bernyanyi meningkatkan kepercayaan diri Anda.

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel more comfortable and boosts my confidence. For example, when I sing, I feel braver and more self-assured.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Jelaskan kapan dan bagaimana Anda belajar bernyanyi dengan detail yang spesifik.

例: Yes, I have. I started learning how to sing when I was in elementary school, and I have been practicing since then.

提案: Jawaban sudah cukup baik, namun bisa diperbaiki dengan memperbaiki tata bahasa dan menambahkan detail yang lebih spesifik tentang alasan Anda ingin bernyanyi untuk orang tua Anda.

例: I want to sing for my parents because they have always supported and encouraged me to be brave and confident in myself.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan logis. Gunakan contoh yang lebih spesifik dan jelaskan bagaimana bernyanyi dapat membawa kebahagiaan dan meningkatkan kepercayaan diri.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people gain confidence and express their emotions. For example, young people who sing often feel more confident and happier.

× Me. Yes I do. It is because singing makes me more comfort table an.

✓ Yes, I do. It is because singing makes me more comfortable.

The word 'comfort table an' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'comfortable' to describe a feeling. Also, 'Me.' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Increase my confidence, such as I can be brave and be sore.

✓ It increases my confidence, so I can be brave and confident.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it a fragment. 'Be sore' is incorrect; likely intended 'be sure' or 'be confident'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× Yes I have I learned thing since when I was younger's especially when I in the elementary school.

✓ Yes, I have learned to sing since I was younger, especially when I was in elementary school.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect phrasing. 'I have I learned thing' is incorrect; 'I have learned to sing' is correct. 'When I in the elementary school' lacks verb 'was'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I want to sing for my parents because my parents always helped me and encourage me to be brave and be confident with myself.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because they have always helped and encouraged me to be brave and confident in myself.

The sentence has inconsistent verb tenses and pronoun repetition. 'My parents' repeated unnecessarily; 'they' is better. 'Helped' and 'encourage' should both be past tense 'helped' and 'encouraged'. 'Be confident with myself' should be 'confident in myself'.

× Yes, I do. It is because singing. Get more confidence an.

✓ Yes, I do. It is because singing gives me more confidence.

The sentence fragment 'It is because singing. Get more confidence an.' is incorrect. 'Get' should be 'gives me' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'An' is incorrect and unnecessary.

× Help the address for being success, for example the youngsters they singing for the self and they can be more confidence and more express their emotion.

✓ It helps address success. For example, youngsters sing for themselves and can be more confident and better express their emotions.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Help the address for being success' is incorrect; should be 'helps address success'. 'They singing for the self' should be 'they sing for themselves'. 'More confidence' should be 'more confident'. 'More express their emotion' should be 'better express their emotions'.