Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer to the question first, then add specific reasons or examples. Use correct verb tenses and avoid unclear phrases. For example, say "I like listening to people sing because their voices are beautiful. However, I only sing in my room because I think my voice is not good."

例: Yes, I like singing, but only when I am alone in my room because I think my voice is not very good. I enjoy listening to singers like Shearing because she has a beautiful voice.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "No, I have never learned how to sing formally. However, I have always enjoyed singing alone or with friends since I was a child, even though they don't like my voice."

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. However, I have always loved singing by myself or with friends since I was a child, even though some people don't like my voice.

提案: Make sure to understand the question and answer it clearly. Use correct vocabulary and grammar. Provide specific details about the person you want to sing for and why. For example, "I want to sing for a singer named Amazon because I like her song 'Malley Hotter', which expresses feelings of sadness."

例: I want to sing for a singer named Amazon because I like her song called 'Malley Hotter'. The song is about feeling sad because her boyfriend didn't say goodnight to her, which shows she is very sensitive.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with examples. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I think singing can bring happiness depending on the song. If the song has positive energy and words, it can make people feel good. But some songs, like those by Billie Eilish, can make people feel sad."

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to people if the song has positive energy and meaningful words. For example, some songs inspire me to do good things, but other songs, like those by Billie Eilish, can make me feel more sad.

× I like to listen to people when they sang, but do I think?

✓ I like to listen to people when they sing, but I think?

The verb 'sang' is in the past tense, but the sentence refers to a general habit or preference, so the present tense 'sing' should be used instead.

× In my room only 'cause my voice it's so bad.

✓ Only in my room because my voice is so bad.

The phrase 'my voice it's so bad' is incorrect; 'it's' is unnecessary and redundant. The correct form is 'my voice is so bad.' Also, 'cause' should be expanded to 'because' for formal correctness.

× I hear people who saying and I like their voice.

✓ I hear people who are singing and I like their voice.

The phrase 'people who saying' is incorrect; it should be 'people who are singing' to use the correct verb form with the relative pronoun.

× There's someone called Shearing.

✓ There is someone called Shearing.

The contraction 'There's' is acceptable in speech, but for clarity and formality, 'There is' is preferred. However, this is minor and acceptable in spoken English.

× Actually, no, I didn't learn how to sing.

✓ Actually, no, I haven't learned how to sing.

The present perfect tense 'have learned' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now rather than a specific past time.

× Since I was a kid, I always singing in my room, by myself, with people, with friends.

✓ Since I was a kid, I have always been singing in my room, by myself, with people, with friends.

The verb phrase 'I always singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I have always been singing' to correctly express a continuous action from the past to the present.

× But they don't like my voice actually.

✓ But they don't actually like my voice.

The adverb 'actually' is better placed before the verb 'like' for natural English word order.

× But I think my voice is good, you know, not that bad.

✓ But I think my voice is good, you know, not that bad.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I can't be seen her.

✓ I can't see her.

The phrase 'I can't be seen her' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I can't see her' to express inability to see someone.

× I want to sing for Amazon.

✓ I want to sing for Amazon.

Assuming 'Amazon' is a person's name or a proper noun here, the sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× She has this song called Malley Hotter.

✓ She has this song called 'Malle Hotter'.

Assuming the song title is 'Malle Hotter', it should be in quotes to indicate a title; otherwise, the sentence is correct.

× She don't want to talk to that to him because he didn't say to her goodnight before he sleep

✓ She doesn't want to talk to him about that because he didn't say goodnight to her before he slept.

The subject-verb agreement error 'She don't' should be 'She doesn't'. Also, 'talk to that to him' is incorrect; it should be 'talk to him about that'. The phrase 'before he sleep' should be 'before he slept' to use past tense.

× It she so sensitive actually.

✓ She is so sensitive actually.

The phrase 'It she' is incorrect; it should be 'She is' to correctly form the sentence.

× It's depends on the song.

✓ It depends on the song.

The auxiliary verb 'is' is unnecessary here; 'depends' is the main verb and should be used alone.

× If the song has this. Good energy, good words.

✓ If the song has good energy and good words.

The period after 'this' is incorrect and breaks the sentence. Also, 'this' is unnecessary here.

× Positive words like make me wanna do good things.

✓ Positive words make me want to do good things.

The phrase 'like make me wanna' is incorrect; it should be 'make me want to' for proper grammar and formality.

× Or a song that make me more depressed like Billie Eilish.

✓ Or a song that makes me more depressed, like Billie Eilish.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'a song'. Also, a comma is needed before 'like Billie Eilish'.

× She sang her song itself.

✓ She sang her own song.

The phrase 'her song itself' is awkward; 'her own song' is more natural. The past tense 'sang' is correct here.