Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons, using complete sentences and correct grammar. Avoid contradictory statements and redundancy.

例: No, I don't like singing because I don't think I have a good voice. However, I agree that singing is a great way to relieve stress.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Use correct verb tenses and sentence structures. Provide specific details clearly and avoid unclear words or phrases.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in college. I was also a member of the choir. Additionally, my wife, who is a music teacher, gave me some vocal training.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear words and grammar mistakes. Use clear vocabulary and correct sentence structure. Directly answer the question and provide specific examples.

例: I like to sing for my friends. When I am at karaoke, everyone enjoys the moment, so I often sing for them.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains grammatical errors. Use precise vocabulary and explain your opinion clearly with supporting reasons.

例: Yes, I agree because melodies can evoke strong emotions in people, making them feel happier or more relaxed.

× No, I don't like singing because I don't think I am.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I don't think I am good at it.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The phrase 'I don't think I am' lacks an object or complement. Adding 'good at it' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× My voice is perfect for singing.

✓ My voice is not perfect for singing.

The student's previous sentence indicates a negative opinion about singing ability, so this sentence contradicts that. Changing 'is' to 'is not' aligns the sentence with the intended meaning.

× But I agree, singing is the best way to. Release the stress.

✓ But I agree, singing is the best way to release stress.

The sentence is split incorrectly with a period after 'to'. Combining the two parts into one sentence and removing the article 'the' before 'stress' improves fluency and correctness.

× Yes, I learned singing when I am in a college, then I am a also a.

✓ Yes, I learned singing when I was in college, then I was also a

The verb tense should be past tense 'was' to match 'learned'. Also, 'a college' is better as 'college' without an article in this context. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for tense and article usage.

× Choir member an my wife also a music teacher and she gave me some tag league, some Focal tablet as well.

✓ choir member. My wife is also a music teacher and she gave me some technique tips and some vocal tablets as well.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'an' should be 'and'; 'tag league' likely means 'technique'; 'Focal tablet' should be 'vocal tablets'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× I like to sing too my friend.

✓ I like to sing to my friends too.

The phrase 'too my friend' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' before 'my friends', and 'too' should be at the end to indicate 'also'.

× When I am in a karagi an everybody quite enjoy that moment then I will sing for them.

✓ When I am in a karaoke and everybody quite enjoys that moment, then I will sing for them.

'Karagi' is likely a misspelling of 'karaoke'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Enjoy' should be 'enjoys' to agree with 'everybody' (third person singular). Commas are added for clarity.

× Yes I agree because the melody and anyways can help people to get more emotional either than happy or unhappy.

✓ Yes, I agree because the melody and lyrics can help people to become more emotional, whether happy or unhappy.

'Anyways' is incorrect here; likely intended 'lyrics'. 'Either than' is incorrect; 'whether' is appropriate. 'Get more emotional' is better expressed as 'become more emotional'. Commas improve readability.