Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but lacks fluency and has some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and connected, and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, you can say, "I don't enjoy singing because I feel embarrassed when I sing in front of others. I prefer activities like painting, dancing, or meditating instead."

例: I don't enjoy singing because I feel embarrassed when I sing in front of others. I prefer activities like painting, dancing, or meditating instead.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use correct verb forms and connect your ideas smoothly. For example, "I have never learned how to sing properly, but I loved singing when I was a child. It was a very enjoyable moment for me."

例: I have never learned how to sing properly, but I loved singing when I was a child. It was a very enjoyable moment for me.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid unnecessary words. For example, "If I sang, I would sing for my little brother who is six years old because he loves singing."

例: If I sang, I would sing for my little brother who is six years old because he loves singing.

提案: Your answer has many unclear and incorrect words. Try to use simple and correct vocabulary and connect your ideas logically. For example, "I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them feel relaxed and engaged. Many enjoy listening and singing along to songs."

例: I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them feel relaxed and engaged. Many enjoy listening and singing along to songs.

× I would rather choose other activities like painting, dancing or meditating rather than. Choosing singing. Big.

✓ I would rather choose other activities like painting, dancing, or meditating rather than choosing singing.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and sentence fragments. 'Rather than' should be followed directly by the verb phrase without a period. Also, 'Big.' is an incomplete fragment and should be removed. The corrected sentence connects ideas properly and forms a complete sentence.

× I know I haven't learn how to sing, but.

✓ I know I haven't learned how to sing, but.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past participle form 'learned' after 'haven't' to form the present perfect tense. This is necessary to indicate an action that has not been completed up to now.

× But now I really don't and.

✓ But now I really don't.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which creates a sentence fragment. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× In my childhood, it was very enraptured moment when I sing.

✓ In my childhood, it was a very enrapturing moment when I sang.

'Enraptured' is an adjective describing a state, but here the intended meaning is that the moment was captivating, so 'enrapturing' (present participle) is appropriate. Also, 'sing' should be in past tense 'sang' to match 'in my childhood'.

× I think if I did sing, I would sing for my little brother who is about 6 years old.

✓ I think if I sang, I would sing for my little brother who is about 6 years old.

The conditional sentence requires the past simple tense 'sang' after 'if' to express a hypothetical situation.

× He is very fond of singing and. I would sing for him.

✓ He is very fond of singing, and I would sing for him.

The original sentence incorrectly splits the sentence with a period after 'and', creating a fragment. Combining the two clauses with a comma and 'and' forms a correct compound sentence.

× Anne makes song for him.

✓ I would make a song for him.

The original sentence is unclear and likely a mistake. 'Anne makes song for him' is incorrect in structure and meaning. Based on context, the student probably meant 'I would make a song for him.' This correction uses proper subject, verb, and article.

× I think many people love singing it really injector them.

✓ I think many people love singing; it really energizes them.

The original sentence has a run-on structure and uses the incorrect word 'injector' instead of 'energizes'. The corrected sentence separates ideas properly and uses the correct verb to express the intended meaning.

× From inside.

✓ From inside,

'From inside.' is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous or following sentence to form a complete thought.

× Many people love listening to song, singing along with the song.

✓ Many people love listening to songs and singing along with them.

The sentence lacks parallel structure and proper pluralization. 'Song' should be plural 'songs' and 'singing along with the song' should be connected with 'and' and use plural pronoun 'them'.

× Make them feel so relaxed. Comfort table. An engaged.

✓ It makes them feel so relaxed, comfortable, and engaged.

The original sentences are fragments and contain incorrect words ('Comfort table' instead of 'comfortable', 'An engaged' is incomplete). The correction forms a complete sentence with proper adjectives.