Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý để ý nghĩa được truyền đạt chính xác. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, tránh lặp từ và câu không hoàn chỉnh.

例: To be honest, I'm not good at singing because I don't have a beautiful voice. Therefore, I don't enjoy singing much. However, I love listening to music, especially dance songs, which make me feel happy.

提案: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh sử dụng các từ không phù hợp và câu không hoàn chỉnh.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. Later, in secondary school, I had music classes where I spent about 45 minutes learning to sing songs and understanding singing techniques.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu rõ ràng và chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Hãy sắp xếp câu hợp lý và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: I want to sing for the people I love, such as my dad, mom, and brother. Maybe in the future, if I have a daughter or son, I will sing for them as well.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và có cấu trúc hơn. Hãy tránh các câu không hoàn chỉnh và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Bạn nên giải thích rõ hơn về lý do tại sao hát có thể mang lại hạnh phúc và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I think singing is a good way to relax and relieve stress. Many people choose to sing to feel better after a long and hard working day.

× To be honest, I'm not well as singing.

✓ To be honest, I'm not good at singing.

The phrase 'not well as singing' is incorrect because 'well' is an adverb and does not fit here. The correct adjective to describe ability is 'good', and the preposition 'at' is needed to indicate the activity. So, 'not good at singing' is the correct form.

× My voice enough to beautiful so I don't like singing.

✓ My voice is not beautiful enough, so I don't like singing.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'is' and has incorrect word order. The correct structure is 'My voice is not beautiful enough' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Are.

This is an incomplete sentence and does not convey any meaning. It should be removed or completed to form a proper sentence.

× However, I love the music alarm listening in dance.

✓ However, I love listening to music and dancing.

The original sentence is confusing and incorrectly structured. 'Music alarm listening in dance' is not a proper phrase. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the intended meaning using correct verb forms and prepositions.

× With their music.

This is a fragment and does not form a complete sentence. It should be removed or integrated into a complete sentence.

× I guess when it was there and in primary school.

✓ I guess it was when I was in primary school.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrectly structured. The corrected sentence uses the past tense 'was' and proper word order to express the time frame correctly.

× In secondary school I have music.

✓ In secondary school, I had music classes.

The verb 'have' should be in past tense 'had' to match the past time frame. Also, 'music' should be specified as 'music classes' for clarity.

× OK are I spend nearly 45 minutes away to learn it and learn how to sing a song or how to know about.

✓ Okay, I spent nearly 45 minutes learning how to sing a song and understanding it.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb tenses. 'Spend' should be past tense 'spent', and 'away to learn it' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper past tense and clearer phrasing.

× I want to sing for the people who I really learned, like my dad, my mom in, my brother in maybe in the future I have her daughter or son.

✓ I want to sing for the people I really love, like my dad, my mom, my brother, and maybe in the future, my daughter or son.

The word 'learned' is incorrect here; it should be 'love'. Also, 'her daughter or son' is incorrect pronoun usage; it should be 'my daughter or son'. The sentence is corrected for proper pronouns and clarity.

× I will sing for them, yeah.

✓ I will sing for them, yeah.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× Singing in good way to relax or? Review this thread.

✓ Singing is a good way to relax or relieve stress.

The original sentence has incorrect preposition 'in' and unclear phrase 'Review this thread'. The corrected sentence uses 'is a good way' and replaces 'review this thread' with 'relieve stress' to make sense.

× Are there many people chose singing lie away the.

✓ There are many people who choose singing to relax.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb agreement and clearer phrasing.

× Become too.

✓ It becomes better too.

The original fragment is incomplete. The corrected sentence completes the thought with proper subject and verb.

× Better after a long hard working day.

✓ It feels better after a long, hard working day.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. The corrected sentence adds 'It feels' to complete the sentence and uses proper adjectives.