Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good and natural, but watch out for subject-verb agreement errors like 'singing my favorite songs lift' which should be 'lifts'. Also, try to use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to make your answer more coherent. Keep your sentences concise and avoid minor grammar mistakes.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, when I'm feeling stressed, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood and makes me feel happier. Moreover, I find it a fun way to connect with others during social gatherings.

提案: Your answer needs improvement in grammar and clarity. Use correct verb forms like 'have learnt' instead of 'have learn'. Also, clarify unclear phrases such as 'took part in a toy' which seems incorrect. Try to use linking words like 'and' to connect ideas smoothly. Make your sentences clear and specific.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. When I was in school, I took part in a music class where the teacher taught basic singing techniques and breathing exercises. It was a fun experience that helped me improve my vocal control and confidence.

提案: Your answer has several grammar and vocabulary errors that affect clarity. Use correct verb forms like 'feels' instead of 'feel', and correct words like 'efforts' instead of 'affords'. Also, avoid unclear phrases like 'rifle atmosphere' and 'strengthens our about'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'moreover' properly to connect ideas. Try to be more specific and clear in your explanations.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because singing for them feels special. They are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better. Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. For example, 'when this sing their favorite songs is either along or with others' is unclear. Use correct sentence structures and linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to improve coherence. Be specific and clear in your examples.

例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs alone or with others.

× For example, when I'm feeling stressed, singing my favorite songs lift my mood and makes me feel happier.

✓ For example, when I'm feeling stressed, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood and makes me feel happier.

The subject 'singing my favorite songs' is singular, so the verb should be 'lifts' to agree in number. 'Lift' is plural form and incorrect here.

× Yes, I have learn how to sing.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing.

The present perfect tense requires the past participle form of the verb. 'Learn' should be 'learned' as the past participle here.

× When I was in school, I took part in a toy where a music teacher talked as basic singing techniques and breathing exercises.

✓ When I was in school, I took part in a choir where a music teacher taught basic singing techniques and breathing exercises.

The sentence contains incorrect word choice and structure. 'Toy' should be 'choir', 'talked as' should be 'taught', and the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Singing for them feel special because they are supportive and appreciate my affords, which motivates me to perfect perform better.

✓ Singing for them feels special because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better.

The subject 'Singing for them' is singular, so the verb should be 'feels'. 'Affords' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'efforts'. Also, 'perfect perform better' is incorrect; 'perform better' is correct.

× Moreover, showing music with love ones creates a warm and rifle atmosphere that strengthens our about.

✓ Moreover, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and lively atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

'Showing music' is incorrect; 'sharing music' is appropriate. 'Love ones' should be 'loved ones'. 'Rifle' is a typo for 'lively'. 'Strengthens our about' is incorrect; 'strengthens our bond' is correct.

× For example, many people feel uplifting and joyful when this sing their favorite songs is either along or with others.

✓ For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs either alone or with others.

The sentence has incorrect word order and word choice. 'Feel uplifting' should be 'feel uplifted'. 'This sing' should be 'they sing'. 'Is either along' should be 'either alone'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.