Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reason with linking words. For example, use 'because' properly and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: No, I don't like singing because my voice is not very good. However, I enjoy listening to songs a lot.

提案: Make your answer more structured and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'but' and 'if' properly. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your future intention clearly.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I don't like singing due to my voice. But if I get a chance in the future, I would definitely like to learn.

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Use correct grammar and linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid repeating the same points and keep your answer concise.

例: If I get a chance to sing, I would like to sing for my parents because they mean a lot to me.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using correct grammar and linking words. Provide specific reasons and avoid repetition. For example, explain how singing affects mood and relaxation.

例: Yes, of course. Singing can bring happiness not only to the singer but also to the listeners because it changes our mood and helps us relax.

× I mostly like to listen songs.

✓ I mostly like to listen to songs.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. So, 'listen songs' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to songs'. This is a common preposition usage error.

× We 'cause my voice is not good for singing, so that is why I don't prefer singing.

✓ Because my voice is not good for singing, that is why I don't prefer singing.

The phrase 'We 'cause' is incorrect and unclear. The correct conjunction to express reason is 'Because'. Also, 'so that is why' is redundant; 'that is why' suffices. This error relates to incorrect pronoun and conjunction usage.

× No, I never learned about how to sing with 'cause I don't like singing because of my voice.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing because I don't like singing due to my voice.

The phrase 'learned about how to sing with' is incorrect. The correct form is 'learned how to sing'. Also, 'because of my voice' is better expressed as 'due to my voice' for clarity. The tense 'have never learned' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now.

× But in future, if there will be chance, I definitely like to learn about how to sing and.

✓ But in the future, if there is a chance, I would definitely like to learn how to sing.

The phrase 'if there will be chance' is incorrect; in conditional sentences, 'if' clauses use present tense, so 'if there is a chance' is correct. Also, 'I definitely like to learn' should be 'I would definitely like to learn' to express willingness in the future. The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion.

× I mostly listening songs.

✓ I mostly listen to songs.

The phrase 'I mostly listening songs' is incorrect because 'listening' is a present participle and cannot be used as the main verb without an auxiliary. The correct simple present tense is 'I mostly listen to songs'. Also, 'listen' requires the preposition 'to'.

× What if there will be a chance to sing song?

✓ What if there is a chance to sing a song?

In conditional sentences starting with 'what if', the verb in the clause should be in present tense, not future. So, 'if there will be' should be 'if there is'. Also, 'sing song' needs an article: 'sing a song'.

× I sing song for my parents because they are my everything.

✓ I sing songs for my parents because they are my everything.

The noun 'song' should be plural 'songs' to indicate general action. Also, 'sing songs' is the correct phrase. This is a singular and plural issue.

× I definitely sing for sing any song for them.

✓ I will definitely sing any song for them.

The phrase 'I definitely sing for sing any song' is incorrect. To express future intention, 'will' is used: 'I will definitely sing any song for them'. Also, 'for sing' is incorrect; 'sing' is the verb and does not need 'for' before it here.

× Yes, of course, singing can brings happiness for people, not only for singer Al, but also for a listener.

✓ Yes, of course, singing can bring happiness to people, not only for the singer, but also for the listener.

After modal verbs like 'can', the base form of the verb is used, so 'can brings' should be 'can bring'. Also, 'for people' is better expressed as 'to people'. 'Singer Al' seems a typo; corrected to 'the singer'. Similarly, 'a listener' should be 'the listener' for specificity.

× We 'cause it, it changes our mood, it feel it is good for relaxation and.

✓ Because of it, it changes our mood; it feels good for relaxation.

'We 'cause it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'Because of it'. Also, 'it feel' should be 'it feels' to agree with the singular subject. The sentence is incomplete and needs proper punctuation.

× Yes, of course singing is singing and bring happiness in everyones mood.

✓ Yes, of course, singing is singing and brings happiness to everyone's mood.

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'everyones' should be 'everyone's' to show possession. The preposition 'in' should be 'to' when referring to mood.