Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains contradictory statements. You said you don't like singing but then mentioned it can increase your self-confidence, which is confusing. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to make your sentences more coherent and concise. Try to directly answer the question with a clear reason and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I don't like singing because I feel self-conscious about my voice. Instead, I prefer listening to music, which I find more enjoyable and relaxing.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to avoid starting sentences with 'And' in formal speaking. Provide a bit more detail about the physical activities to enrich your answer.

例: To be honest, no, I have never learned how to sing because I'm not a huge fan of it. Instead, I prefer to spend my time doing physical activities like jogging and playing basketball.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer expressions. Also, add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: If I had to choose one person, I would sing for my girlfriend because I believe it's a meaningful way to express my love for her.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but you can improve coherence by using better linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating similar words like 'mood' twice in one sentence.

例: Actually, it depends on the situation and the individual's personality. For example, if someone is feeling down, singing can definitely help lift their spirits and increase their energy.

× Actually, no, I don't like singing. Because it can increase my self-confidence.

✓ Actually, no, I don't like singing because it can increase my self-confidence.

The sentence 'Because it can increase my self-confidence.' is a sentence fragment and cannot stand alone. It should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence.

× Uh, I don't know how to think so I prefer to listen to items instead of singing.

✓ Uh, I don't know how to think, so I prefer to listen to items instead of singing.

There is a missing comma before the conjunction 'so' which connects two independent clauses. Adding the comma improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× And instead of that I tried to spend my time on some physical activities.

✓ And instead of that, I tried to spend my time doing some physical activities.

The phrase 'spend my time on some physical activities' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'spend my time doing something' to indicate the activity being performed.

× If I want mention one person it would be my girlfriend because in my opinion it's a good way to show how much will I love her.

✓ If I want to mention one person, it would be my girlfriend because, in my opinion, it's a good way to show how much I love her.

The phrase 'If I want mention' is missing the infinitive 'to'. Also, the word order in 'how much will I love her' is incorrect; it should be 'how much I love her'. Commas are added for clarity.

× If he or she is in a bad mood, definitely it helps them to boost their energy and mood.

✓ If he or she is in a bad mood, definitely it helps him or her to boost his or her energy and mood.

The pronouns 'he or she' and 'them' do not agree in number. To maintain agreement, use 'him or her' and 'his or her' to match the singular subject.