Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks fluency and coherence. Try to form complete sentences and connect your ideas smoothly using linking words. Also, avoid short, fragmented sentences and aim for clarity.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my feelings and emotions. Moreover, it helps me to relax and feel more at ease after a long day.

提案: Your response is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, using complete sentences. Avoid unnecessary fillers and ensure your ideas are logically connected.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually sing casually, like when I'm alone or driving, but I haven't had any professional training.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because singing for them feels special. Their support creates a warm and encouraging atmosphere.

提案: Your answer is brief and has grammatical errors. Try to expand your response with reasons or examples, and use correct subject-verb agreement.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people, but it depends on the individual and the situation. For me, singing is a great way to feel joyful and relaxed.

× And it's a way. To explain our feeling, our emotions.

✓ And it's a way to explain our feelings, our emotions.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. 'And it's a way.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the following phrase to form a complete sentence. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context of multiple emotions.

× And it also. Make myself relax so I like singing.

✓ And it also makes me relax, so I like singing.

The verb 'Make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'myself' is incorrect here; the correct pronoun is 'me'. The sentence was fragmented and needed to be combined properly.

× Uhm, a bathroom singer.

✓ Uhm, I am a bathroom singer.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'I am' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× And I like to sing without I'm driving but I have never experienced. It.

✓ And I like to sing while I'm driving, but I have never experienced it.

The phrase 'without I'm driving' is incorrect; 'while I'm driving' is appropriate to express simultaneous actions. Also, 'experienced. It.' is fragmented and should be combined as 'experienced it.'.

× I would like to sing for my family and my close friend as singing for them fields special because they are supported and it creates a warm, encouraging atmosphere.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and my close friends as singing for them feels special because they are supportive and it creates a warm, encouraging atmosphere.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'family'. 'Fields' is a typo and should be 'feels'. 'Supported' should be 'supportive' to correctly describe the people. These corrections improve agreement and word choice.

× Well, it depends upon the person and situation. For me it works, but maybe it don't work for other people.

✓ Well, it depends on the person and situation. For me, it works, but maybe it doesn't work for other people.

'Depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more common. The phrase 'maybe it don't work' is incorrect; the correct form is 'maybe it doesn't work' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.