Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且表达不清晰，语法错误较多，建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题并给出具体原因，避免冗余。

例: No, I don't like singing because I find it hard to hit the right notes. Instead, I prefer listening to music and enjoy songs sung by others.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，表达不够流畅，建议注意动词形式和句子连贯性，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in school. The music teacher taught us basic singing techniques and exercises, which helped me improve my vocal control and confidence.

提案: 回答内容不够连贯，部分句子不完整，建议使用连接词并补充具体细节，使表达更清晰自然。

例: I want to sing for my daughter because singing helps her fall asleep. Although I'm not a good singer, I enjoy it because it comforts her and shows my love.

提案: 回答语法和词汇错误较多，表达不清晰，建议简化句子，直接表达观点并用具体例子支持。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness, especially when many people sing together. It creates a joyful and friendly atmosphere for everyone.

× I don't like a singing because I do not have those kind of talent to catch the right tone.

✓ I don't like singing because I do not have that kind of talent to catch the right tone.

这里“a singing”中的冠词“a”不应该和动名词“singing”连用，动名词前不加冠词。并且“those kind of talent”应改为“that kind of talent”，因为“kind”是单数。

× I don't like a singing because I do not have those kind of talent to catch the right tone.

✓ I don't like singing because I do not have that kind of talent to catch the right tone.

“those kind of talent”中“those”应改为“that”，因为“kind”是单数，量词应与名词单复数一致。

× And compare with singing I'm.

✓ And compared with singing, I prefer listening to music.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语动词，且表达不清晰。应调整为完整句子，表达比较的意思。

× I preferred to listening the music and I'm singing from others because some sometimes seen in cambra Miri like Sanders himself hyperness.

✓ I prefer listening to music and singing from others because sometimes I see in camera Miri like Sanders himself's happiness.

“preferred to listening”应为“prefer listening to”，“listening”后应接介词“to”。“singing from others”表达不清楚，改为“singing by others”更合适。句子整体表达不清晰，需调整。

× Yes, I've learned how to singing when I was in school.

✓ Yes, I've learned how to sing when I was in school.

“learned how to singing”中“to”后应接动词原形“sing”，而不是动名词“singing”。

× I took part in a corner where the music teacher taught us basically singing techniques and bring exercise.

✓ I took part in a course where the music teacher taught us basic singing techniques and breathing exercises.

“corner”应为“course”，表示课程。形容词“basically”应为“basic”，名词“bring exercise”应为“breathing exercises”。

× This experience help me improve my vocal control and confidence in singing.

✓ This experience helps me improve my vocal control and confidence in singing.

主语“This experience”是单数，谓语动词应加-s，变为“helps”。

× I want to sing it for my daughter because I could hear the singing helps us fell asleep.

✓ I want to sing for my daughter because I believe singing helps us fall asleep.

“sing it for”中“it”多余，应去掉。动词“fell”应为“fall”，表示入睡。

× Although I'm not a very good singer, I enjoy singing. Lola base to comfort her.

✓ Although I'm not a very good singer, I enjoy singing. I sing to comfort her.

“Lola base to comfort her”句子不通顺，应改为“I sing to comfort her”，表达为“我唱歌来安慰她”。

× Singing for her is a special way to show my love and care.

✓ Singing for her is a special way to show my love and care.

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× I believe think Amber can create a candle for hapiness atmosphere for people especially when many people singing together is very good and happiness web for everybody.

✓ I believe singing can create a happy atmosphere for people, especially when many people sing together. It is very good and brings happiness to everybody.

原句结构混乱，词汇错误（Amber应为singing，candle应为create，hapiness应为happy），需重组句子使其通顺。