Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và trực tiếp, nhưng bạn nên tránh lặp từ và làm câu trả lời thêm phong phú bằng cách sử dụng từ vựng đa dạng hơn và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích hát.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions and it always lifts my spirits, especially when I sing my favorite songs.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt thì quá khứ (learned) và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh những câu không rõ nghĩa hoặc không liên quan như "this measure affect my last period". Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in high school. It was an optional subject, and I really enjoyed the lessons because they helped me improve my vocal skills.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn ngắn và thiếu chi tiết. Bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách giải thích lý do bạn muốn hát cho những người đó và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: I want to sing for my family and my partner because singing for them makes me feel connected and it brings joy to all of us.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời có tính logic và thêm ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music acts like medicine; it helps people relax and boosts their mood, especially after a stressful day.

× I have learn how to sing when I was a high school student.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was a high school student.

The verb 'learn' is incorrectly used in the present tense 'learn' after 'have'. The correct past participle form is 'learned' (or 'learnt'). Since the sentence refers to a past event, the past tense 'learned' should be used. Suggestion: Use the past tense or past participle form 'learned' after 'have' to indicate completed action in the past.

× Music is an optional choice. But this measure affect my last period, right?

✓ Music is an optional choice. But this measure affected my last period, right?

The verb 'affect' is in the present tense but the context refers to a past event ('last period'). Therefore, the past tense 'affected' should be used. Also, 'measure' is a bit unclear here but assuming it refers to an action or decision, the verb tense must match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense 'affected' to match the past time reference.

× I want to sing for my family and my man.

✓ I want to sing for my family and my husband.

The word 'man' is informal and ambiguous in this context. The correct pronoun or noun to refer to a male partner in a formal or clear way is 'husband'. Suggestion: Use 'husband' instead of 'man' to clearly indicate the male partner.

× Yes I do because I believe that music is the best medicine to everyone, like is can have everyone to relax an boost their mood.

✓ Yes I do because I believe that music is the best medicine for everyone, as it can help everyone relax and boost their mood.

Several issues: 'to everyone' should be 'for everyone' as 'medicine for someone' is correct. 'like is can have everyone' is incorrect; it should be 'as it can help everyone'. Also, 'an boost' should be 'and boost'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and conjunctions, and correct verb forms to improve clarity and grammar.