Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Please be careful with pronunciation and word choice, for example, 'kissing' should be 'singing'. Also, try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love singing because it is one of my favourite hobbies. It keeps me engaged and entertained, and I find it very comforting. Although I feel my voice is not perfect, I still enjoy singing as it relaxes me.

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer directly related to the question. Avoid incomplete sentences and irrelevant words. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I enjoy singing along to new songs because I like their rhythm and mood.

提案: Your answer is relevant and detailed, but try to avoid repeating phrases and make your sentences more concise. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer to sing for myself because I am quite shy. I don't like singing in front of others as I worry they might judge me, which could affect my confidence. So, I usually sing when I am alone.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and avoid abrupt endings. Use specific examples and linking words to make your answer coherent and clear.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For example, I love to sing in my free time because it lifts my mood when I feel sad or lonely. Music is a great way to express feelings and improve one's emotional state.

× Yes, I love kissing because it is one of my hobbies and singing keeps me engaged in an activity.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it is one of my hobbies and singing keeps me engaged in an activity.

The word 'kissing' is incorrect here as the question is about singing. The correct gerund form is 'singing' to match the context of the question.

× As it is very entertaining and it is very comforting for me.

✓ It is very entertaining and comforting for me.

The original sentence is a fragment and not a complete sentence. Removing 'As' and combining the ideas into one sentence corrects the structure.

× I love to sing even though I feel like my voice is not that good but still I like to sing as part of my hobby.

✓ I love to sing even though I feel my voice is not that good, but I still like to sing as part of my hobby.

The sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Adding a comma before 'but' and removing redundant words improves clarity and structure.

× No, I have not learned how to sing. I only sing when.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing. I only sing when I hear a new song.

The sentence 'I only sing when.' is incomplete. Completing it with 'I hear a new song' makes it a complete and meaningful sentence.

× I hear a new song, I like to sing it because of the vibe of the school and how. Daughter ****. Sorry Yahoo.

✓ I hear a new song, I like to sing it because of the vibe it gives me.

The original sentence contains unclear and irrelevant phrases. Simplifying and clarifying the sentence improves understanding.

× I prefer to sing for myself because I am quite a shy person and I don't like to sing in front of someone else or an audience because I feel like that they I feel like they would judge me for my singing and it would obviously ruin my confidence.

✓ I prefer to sing for myself because I am quite a shy person and I don't like to sing in front of others or an audience because I feel they would judge me for my singing and it would ruin my confidence.

The phrase 'someone else or an audience' is awkward; 'others or an audience' is more natural. Also, the repeated 'I feel like that they I feel like they' is redundant and incorrect. Simplifying the pronouns and removing redundancy improves clarity.

× That's why I like to sing when I'm alone.

✓ That's why I like to sing when I'm alone.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to people for example, if I talk about myself, I love to sing in my free time the reason being that it lifts up my mood whenever I'm sad or I'm feeling lonely, I.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, if I talk about myself, I love to sing in my free time because it lifts my mood whenever I'm sad or feeling lonely.

The original sentence is a run-on and incomplete. Breaking it into two sentences and completing the thought improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Music is a very good way to express your feelings and. It is very good if you want to.

✓ Music is a very good way to express your feelings, and it is very helpful if you want to do so.

The original sentences are incomplete and fragmented. Combining them into a complete sentence with proper conjunction and completion improves readability and correctness.