Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be more concise and natural. Try to avoid repeating the same ideas and use varied vocabulary. Also, directly answer the question first, then add supporting details.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. In my free time, I often sing my favorite songs to unwind and have fun.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct grammar and clearer sentences. Also, directly answer the question and then provide details with linking words.

例: During school, my music teacher taught me to play musical instruments and introduced me to different aspects of music. However, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I am happy with my natural voice.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: I enjoy singing when I get together with my friends or family in the evenings. Also, I plan to sing for my bride during my wedding ceremony, which would be a special moment for me.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to explain your opinion logically.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness, but it depends on the song and the listener's mood. Some songs are uplifting and can make people feel joyful, while others might evoke different emotions.

× During my school time my music teacher tend to learn me musical instruments and and different types of study in related to music.

✓ During my school time, my music teacher tended to teach me musical instruments and different types of studies related to music.

The verb 'tend' should be in the past tense 'tended' to agree with the past time frame 'During my school time'. Also, 'learn me' is incorrect; the teacher teaches, and the student learns. Therefore, 'teach me' is correct. Additionally, 'and and' is a typo and should be 'and'. 'Different types of study in related to music' is awkward; it should be 'different types of studies related to music' for clarity and correctness.

× During my school time my music teacher tend to learn me musical instruments and and different types of study in related to music.

✓ During my school time, my music teacher tended to teach me musical instruments and different types of studies related to music.

The phrase 'in related to music' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'related to music' without 'in'. This correction improves the sentence's grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I have real voice and.

✓ I have a real voice, and I'm very happy with it.

The sentence 'I have real voice and.' is incomplete and lacks proper structure. It should be combined with the following sentence to form a complete thought: 'I have a real voice, and I'm very happy with it.' Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'real voice'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun to use after a preposition like 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is commonly used. For grammatical correctness, 'Whom do you want to sing for?' is preferred.

× But I have planned that when I get married then during my marriage time I would really love to sing for my ride.

✓ But I have planned that when I get married, during my wedding, I would really love to sing for my bride.

The phrase 'during my marriage time' is awkward; 'during my wedding' is more natural. Also, 'ride' is a typo and should be 'bride'. The sentence uses 'would' correctly to express a future intention in a conditional context.

× It depends on upon the song.

✓ It depends on the song.

The phrase 'depends on upon' is redundant. The correct preposition is 'depends on'. Removing 'upon' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× There two years singing the song depends the depends on the mood of a person and different songs are later two different happiness.

✓ There are two years of singing; the song depends on the mood of a person, and different songs bring different kinds of happiness.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'There two years singing' lacks a verb and is unclear. 'Depends the depends on' is repetitive and incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning with proper structure and verb usage.

× So some songs are very good which will bring happiness to people.

✓ So, some songs are very good and will bring happiness to people.

The relative pronoun 'which' is unnecessary here and can be replaced with 'and' to connect the clauses smoothly. This improves sentence flow and clarity.