Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions, such as happiness and sadness. Moreover, singing allows me to relax and feel more connected to my feelings.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear and concise response with proper sentence structure and specific details about when and where you learned to sing.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in kindergarten and also during middle school. At that time, we practiced singing different tones and melodies.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and explain your feelings with specific examples using linking words.

例: It depends on my emotions. For example, when I feel lonely or stressed, I like to sing for myself to feel better and calm down.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand and lacks clear content. Provide a direct answer with specific examples and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. For instance, during traditional celebrations and weddings, singing is an important part that creates joy and unity among people.

× I like to think. Becauses. It's like expressing my feeling and happiness and sadness and emotional things. Then must I think.

✓ I like to sing because it's like expressing my feelings, happiness, sadness, and emotions. Then I must think.

The original sentence uses 'Becauses' incorrectly as a conjunction and has fragmented sentences. 'Because' should be used to connect clauses properly. Also, 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the list of emotions. The sentence structure is corrected to form a coherent statement.

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✓ Oh, I learned how to sing in kindergarten and also in middle school. At that time, we learned the tone of singing.

The original sentence misuses 'have a learned' and has incorrect word order and unnecessary words like 'are' and 'Creates'. The past tense 'learned' is used correctly here to indicate completed action. 'Kindergarten' and 'middle school' are corrected for clarity, and 'tone of the seeing' is corrected to 'tone of singing'.

× It's depending on my emotional. Sync because when I feeling so lonely or. How to say the feeling? Difficulty. Hi there, I want to think about the law.

✓ It depends on my emotions because when I feel lonely or... How to say the feeling? Difficulty. Hi there, I want to think about the law.

'It's depending' is incorrect; the correct form is 'It depends' (present tense). 'My emotional' should be 'my emotions' (plural noun). 'When I feeling' should be 'when I feel' (present tense verb). The sentence is fragmented and unclear, but corrections focus on grammar issues.

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✓ I think so because traditionally, during celebrations and marriages, Mongolians celebrate with a hog.

The original sentence has fragmented clauses and incorrect conjunction use (''cause' is informal and used improperly). The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness. Unclear phrases like 'This is bridge Nick Civil must've' are omitted as they do not form meaningful content.