Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add a reason or example. For instance, avoid saying 'I I' and 'Uh'.

例: No, I don't like singing because I am not very good at it. I tried singing when I was in sixth standard, but I didn't enjoy it much.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repeating phrases and be specific about your experience. For example, use 'because' to explain why you stopped learning.

例: Yes, I tried learning to sing when I was in second standard, but because it was very hot and I wasn't very interested, I gave up.

提案: Improve clarity and coherence by structuring your answer with linking words and correcting grammar. Be specific about the occasion and your intention. For example, mention the upcoming event clearly and connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't have a specific person in mind, but I would like to sing for my parents. Since their anniversary is coming soon, it would be nice to do something special for them.

提案: Focus on making your answer clear and logical by avoiding incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples.

例: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people. Even if someone is not a good singer, singing funny songs can make others smile and feel joyful in daily life.

× I I don't because I don't sing well.

✓ I don't because I don't sing well.

The repetition of 'I' at the beginning is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence structure.

× I've tried singing where I was in my 6 standard.

✓ I tried singing when I was in my 6th standard.

The present perfect tense 'I've tried' is less appropriate here because the action is clearly in the past and completed. Also, 'where' is incorrect; 'when' is the correct conjunction to refer to time. '6 standard' should be '6th standard' to indicate the grade.

× Uh, I would like to give it a try, but it's a no for me.

✓ Uh, I would like to give it a try, but it's a no for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× When I was second.

✓ When I was in second standard.

The sentence fragment 'When I was second.' is incomplete. Adding 'in second standard' completes the thought and makes it grammatically correct.

× When I was in second standard, I did try learning it, but it was quite hot and I was not very much interested and singing.

✓ When I was in second standard, I did try learning it, but it was quite hot and I was not very interested in singing.

The phrase 'not very much interested and singing' is incorrect. It should be 'not very interested in singing' to correctly express lack of interest in the activity.

× So I kind of gave up.

✓ So I kind of gave up.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I don't have anyone specific to sing for but.

✓ I don't have anyone specific to sing for, but

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but.' It should be connected to the next clause or completed properly. Adding a comma indicates continuation.

× I would definitely give a try for my parents.

✓ I would definitely give it a try for my parents.

The phrase 'give a try' is incomplete without an object. Adding 'it' makes the phrase correct.

× As of there in verse 3 is approaching and it would be nice for me to do something nice for them.

✓ As their anniversary is approaching, it would be nice for me to do something nice for them.

The phrase 'As of there in verse 3' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to refer to 'their anniversary.' Correcting the phrase to 'As their anniversary is approaching' uses the correct prepositions and words.

× So yes, I would definitely give it a try.

✓ So yes, I would definitely give it a try.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Of course, even if someone is not a good single still.

✓ Of course, even if someone is not a good singer still.

The word 'single' is incorrect here; it should be 'singer' to refer to a person who sings.

× That both and can make someone happy by singing funny.

✓ They both can make someone happy by singing funny songs.

The sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Replacing 'That both and' with 'They both' and adding 'songs' clarifies the meaning.

× So yes, definitely and if.

✓ So yes, definitely.

The phrase 'and if' is incomplete and unnecessary here. Removing it corrects the sentence.

× Singing just bring joy.

✓ Singing just brings joy.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'Singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'brings' not 'bring'.

× In your daily life it gives you.

✓ In your daily life, it gives you joy.

The sentence is incomplete. Adding 'joy' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.