Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear opinion and reason, using correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: No, I don't really like singing because I don't have a good singing voice, so I usually avoid it.

提案: Your answer is too long and contains many errors and unclear phrases. Try to give a concise, clear response with correct grammar and vocabulary, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, when I was a child, I enjoyed singing in the bathroom for fun.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains unclear phrases. Try to answer directly, use linking words, and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: I would like to sing for my friends and family because it makes me feel happy and helps me connect with them, even though I don't have a very good singing voice.

提案: Your answer shows good ideas but is difficult to understand due to grammar and word choice errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with relevant vocabulary and use linking words to organize your answer.

例: Of course, I believe singing, especially popular and traditional songs in my country, brings people a lot of joy and makes their lives happier compared to a world without music.

× Not really. I'm not as strong advocate of sending these are the fact that we normally don't have a policeman singing voice.

✓ Not really. I'm not a strong advocate of singing because we normally don't have a pleasant singing voice.

The phrase 'strong advocate of sending these are the fact' is incorrect and confusing. 'Sending' should be 'singing'. 'Policeman singing voice' is incorrect; likely intended 'pleasant singing voice'. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'strong advocate'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct adjective use.

× Not really, unfortunately I haven't had a chance to educate about singing throughout my life.

✓ Not really, unfortunately I haven't had a chance to learn about singing throughout my life.

The verb 'educate' is incorrectly used here; 'educate' is transitive and requires an object (someone to educate). The correct verb is 'learn' to express acquiring knowledge. Also, 'haven't had' is correct present perfect tense to indicate experience up to now.

× How are when I was a child, I used to be extremely interested in saying in particularly in bathroom, but if you main learning about sending academically, I haven't never experienced it.

✓ When I was a child, I used to be extremely interested in singing, particularly in the bathroom, but if you mean learning about singing academically, I have never experienced it.

The phrase 'How are when' is incorrect; it should be 'When'. 'Saying' should be 'singing'. 'In particularly in bathroom' should be 'particularly in the bathroom' with correct prepositions and article. 'If you main learning' should be 'if you mean learning'. Double negative 'haven't never' is incorrect; use 'have never'.

× Well, honestly speaking, I have been always interested in saying in within my friends and families identify that it gives me a great deal of satisfaction, enjoyment.

✓ Well, honestly speaking, I have always been interested in singing with my friends and family because it gives me a great deal of satisfaction and enjoyment.

'Saying in within' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'singing with'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring collectively. 'Identify that' is incorrect; 'because' or 'as' is appropriate to show reason. Also, 'have been always' is better as 'have always been' for natural word order.

× However, as I mentioned earlier, I haven't had a chance to sync with my family and friends due to the fact that I normally don't have a police or singing voice.

✓ However, as I mentioned earlier, I haven't had a chance to sing with my family and friends due to the fact that I normally don't have a pleasant singing voice.

'Sync' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. 'Police or singing voice' is incorrect; likely intended 'pleasant singing voice'. The preposition 'with' is correct after 'sing' when referring to others.

× Of course, I think thing in particular listing align with some popular and traditional signs, particularly in my country, can give people a great deal of satisfaction and enjoyment and it can make them happier in comparison to the world without any music and singing voice.

✓ Of course, I think singing, particularly songs aligned with some popular and traditional styles in my country, can give people a great deal of satisfaction and enjoyment and can make them happier compared to a world without any music or singing.

'Thing in particular listing align' is incorrect; likely intended 'singing, particularly songs aligned'. 'Signs' should be 'styles' or 'songs'. 'In comparison to the world' is better as 'compared to a world'. 'Singing voice' at the end is awkward; 'singing' suffices. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct adjective use.