Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but could be more natural and clearer. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, clarify who your favorite singer is and avoid mixing unrelated ideas in one sentence. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. Moreover, my favorite singer is LG Dosanjh. Whenever I feel bored, I listen to his songs, which always lift my mood.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Start with a direct response, then add specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in senior secondary school. During that time, I participated in the annual function and won several medals in singing competitions.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and unclear words. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because it feels comfortable and meaningful. When I sing in front of them, I feel relaxed and confident.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Also, avoid unclear phrases and focus on specific reasons why singing brings happiness.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and enjoy themselves. For example, at social gatherings, people often sing songs to have fun and relieve stress.

× And moreover, my favorite singer is the LG Dosanjh whenever I feel tedious and that time I listened the Jeep Dosanjh.

✓ And moreover, my favorite singer is the LG Dosanjh. Whenever I feel tedious, I listen to the LG Dosanjh.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'listened' (past tense) and omits the preposition 'to' after 'listen'. The verb 'listen' should be followed by 'to' when indicating what is being listened to. Also, 'Jeep Dosanjh' seems to be a typo for 'LG Dosanjh'. The sentence is corrected to present simple tense to match the habitual action and proper preposition usage.

× Definitely when I was in my senior secondary school that time I had participate on annual function.

✓ Definitely, when I was in my senior secondary school, I participated in the annual function.

The phrase 'had participate' is incorrect; the past perfect 'had participated' is not appropriate here because the sentence refers to a simple past event. The correct simple past tense 'participated' should be used. Also, the preposition 'on' should be 'in' when referring to participation in an event.

× In that time I got many medals from singing competition.

✓ At that time, I got many medals from singing competitions.

The phrase 'In that time' is better expressed as 'At that time' to indicate a specific past moment. Also, 'singing competition' should be plural 'singing competitions' if multiple medals were won. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition and plural form.

× Singing for them feels very comfort table and meaningful.

✓ Singing for them feels very comfortable and meaningful.

The word 'comfort table' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'comfortable'. This correction fixes the adjective form to properly describe the feeling.

× And. Venom. I love when I single in front of my close friends, I feel very relaxed and confidently.

✓ And, I love when I sing in front of my close friends; I feel very relaxed and confident.

The sentence contains several errors: 'Venom' is likely a typo and removed; 'single' should be 'sing'; 'confidently' is an adverb but the adjective 'confident' is needed to describe 'I feel'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper word usage.

× Yeah, singing can bring happiness to people becauses a it is a source of relaxation and recreation and.

✓ Yeah, singing can bring happiness to people because it is a source of relaxation and recreation.

The phrase 'becauses a it is a' contains typographical errors and unnecessary articles. The correction removes extra words and fixes 'because' spelling for clarity.

× Whenever or any proposal board they have, they want to sing any songs because it is a. Great activity of our mind and it relieves stress.

✓ Whenever there is a proposal board, they want to sing songs because it is a great activity for our mind and it relieves stress.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Or any proposal board they have' is restructured to 'Whenever there is a proposal board' for clarity. 'Any songs' is simplified to 'songs'. 'Great activity of our mind' is corrected to 'great activity for our mind' to use the correct preposition. The sentence is restructured for grammatical correctness and clarity.