Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la fluidité et la clarté de votre réponse en évitant les phrases incomplètes et les répétitions. Utilisez des phrases complètes et organisez vos idées de manière cohérente pour rendre votre réponse plus naturelle et efficace.

例: Yes, I have loved singing since I was a child because it helps me relax and enjoy music. Singing with my loved ones makes the experience even more special and enjoyable.

提案: Faites attention à la grammaire et à la structure des phrases. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées et évitez les erreurs comme "a participated". Soyez plus précis dans vos détails pour enrichir votre réponse.

例: Yes, I participated in a singing class when I was in second or third grade. It was very interesting, and I also made friends who shared my love for singing.

提案: Clarifiez vos idées et évitez les répétitions inutiles. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et naturelle. Soyez précis dans vos exemples pour mieux illustrer votre réponse.

例: I want to sing for the special people in my life, such as my family and close friends. In the future, I hope to sing for my husband as a gift at our wedding.

提案: Améliorez la cohérence et la clarté de votre réponse en utilisant des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison. Évitez les erreurs grammaticales et soyez plus précis dans vos explications.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music transcends language barriers. Even if people speak different languages, they can sing together, which lifts everyone's mood.

× Yes, I really like singing since I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I have really liked singing since I was a kid.

The sentence uses 'like' in present simple with 'since' which requires present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Use 'have liked' instead of 'like'.

× Aye. Just to sing a lot and I also. Love music, so that's why singing is really relaxing and chilling to me.

✓ Yes, I just like to sing a lot and I also love music, so that's why singing is really relaxing and chilling to me.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'Aye' is informal and unclear; 'Just to sing a lot' is incomplete. Corrected to a full sentence with proper conjunctions and verb forms.

× Also I love seeing with my love ones.

✓ Also, I love singing with my loved ones.

The verb 'seeing' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'singing'. Also, 'love ones' should be 'loved ones'. The preposition 'with' is correct.

× Yes, I have a participated in a singing class when I was in grade. 2nd grade or third grade if I'm not mistaken.

✓ Yes, I participated in a singing class when I was in 2nd or 3rd grade, if I'm not mistaken.

The phrase 'have a participated' is incorrect; 'participated' is the correct past tense verb. Also, 'grade. 2nd grade' is awkward; corrected for clarity and grammar.

× And as it was really interesting and I also make friends, that has also the love for singing.

✓ It was really interesting, and I also made friends who also love singing.

The sentence is fragmented and has tense inconsistency. 'Make' should be past tense 'made' to match 'was'. 'That has also the love' is incorrect; corrected to 'who also love'.

× I want to sing for my special ones in my life and someone who someone that I feel comfortable with like my family, my close friends or maybe in the future I will sing for my husband.

✓ I want to sing for the special people in my life, someone I feel comfortable with, like my family, my close friends, or maybe in the future, I will sing for my husband.

'My special ones' is informal; 'special people' is clearer. 'Someone who someone that' is redundant; corrected to 'someone I feel comfortable with'. Added commas for clarity.

× As a gift in the wedding.

✓ As a gift at the wedding.

The phrase is a fragment without a subject or verb. It is corrected to a prepositional phrase with correct preposition 'at' instead of 'in'.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music has no barrier.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music has no barriers.

'Barrier' should be plural 'barriers' to match the meaning of 'no obstacles' in general.

× Even when we speak different languages, we can sing.

✓ Even when we speak different languages, we can still sing.

Adding 'still' improves the sentence flow and meaning, emphasizing the ability despite differences.

× Whatever too. Bring up the mood an say together.

✓ Whatever language, singing can bring up the mood and help us sing together.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Corrected to a complete sentence with proper structure and meaning.