Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

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例: Yes, I like singing because it is a great way to express my emotions. For example, I enjoy singing with my friends during karaoke sessions, which helps me relax and improve my focus.

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例: No, I have never learned how to sing professionally. Instead, I prefer to listen to music because it helps me enjoy different styles and improve my appreciation for singing.

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例: I want to sing for people all around the world because I have a dream to become a K-pop artist and share my music globally.

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例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it can change their mood and help them feel more joyful and relaxed.

× Singing is great way to express emotions.

✓ Singing is a great way to express emotions.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'great way'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Singing is. Improve my focus.

✓ Singing improves my focus.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a proper verb structure. Combining the two fragments into one sentence with the correct verb form 'improves' makes it grammatically correct and clear.

× No, I never learned how to sing.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing.

The present perfect tense 'have never learned' is more appropriate here because the action relates to the experience up to the present moment. Using 'never learned' in simple past is less suitable without a specific time reference.

× Instead of I'd like to listen to music.

✓ Instead, I'd like to listen to music.

'Instead of' is a preposition that should be followed by a noun or gerund, not a clause. Using 'Instead,' as an adverb correctly introduces the alternative action.

× I want to sing. All of the peoples around the world becaused I have a dream to be a K pop artists.

✓ I want to sing for all the people around the world because I have a dream to be a K-pop artist.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural noun for persons. Also, 'artists' should be singular 'artist' to match 'a dream to be'. The sentence also needed 'for' after 'sing' and correction of 'becaused' to 'because'.

× Yes I do. I think singing can bring happiness to people because when people are thinking they're mode are changing. And savor happens.

✓ Yes, I do. I think singing can bring happiness to people because when people are thinking, their mood changes and savor happens.

'They're mode' is incorrect; it should be 'their mood' to show possession. Also, 'are changing' is better as 'changes' for clarity and correctness. Commas are added for better sentence flow.