Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有一些语法错误和词汇使用不当，比如“seeing up”应为“singing”。建议你直接回答问题，使用正确的词汇，并且避免重复。可以简洁地表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并且用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy. Sometimes, I sing alone at home, and if I have the chance, I enjoy singing with my friends at karaoke bars where we can sing together.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议你直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，说明你没有学过唱歌，但喜欢唱歌的原因。使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing professionally. Although I enjoy singing, I haven't had the chance to take lessons. For me, singing is a relaxing activity, so I don't worry about singing perfectly.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和表达错误，且内容不够具体。建议你明确回答你想为谁唱歌，并举具体例子说明场合。使用连词使句子连贯。

例: I would like to sing for my family and friends, especially during festivals or when we travel together. Singing for them makes me happy and helps create a joyful atmosphere.

提案: 回答不清楚且有很多语法错误。建议你直接表达你的观点，说明唱歌能带来快乐的原因，并用连词连接句子，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows us to express our feelings. We don't need to sing perfectly; just singing songs we love can make us feel joyful.

× Yes, I like seeing up because it is very happy thing.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it is a very happy thing.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'singing'. Also, 'happy' is an adjective and should be used with an article 'a' before 'thing' to form 'a very happy thing'.

× So sometimes I would like to sing by myself at home about if I have the chance, I would like to sing with my friend in the karaoke is a public public place, we can sing together.

✓ So sometimes I would like to sing by myself at home. If I have the chance, I would like to sing with my friend in a karaoke, which is a public place where we can sing together.

The phrase 'about if' is incorrect; it should be separated into two sentences for clarity. 'In the karaoke' should be 'in a karaoke' or 'at a karaoke place'. Also, 'public public place' is repetitive and should be 'public place'. The sentence structure is improved by splitting into two sentences and adding relative clause for clarity.

× Uh, no, absolutely no. Even though I like singing, but I don't have the chance to learn some skills about thing, but sometimes I but because it would be completely relaxing thing for me, so I don't need to sing very well.

✓ Uh, no, absolutely not. Even though I like singing, I don't have the chance to learn some skills about it. Sometimes I sing because it is completely relaxing for me, so I don't need to sing very well.

The use of both 'even though' and 'but' together is incorrect; only one conjunction is needed. The phrase 'skills about thing' is unclear and should be 'skills about it'. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be restructured for clarity and correctness.

× Maybe I would like to sing for my families and friends a for example during some.

✓ Maybe I would like to sing for my family and friends, for example during some festivals.

The word 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family. The sentence is incomplete and needs to be completed with 'festivals' to make sense.

× when I was in the UH in my journey with my friend, I would like to sing for them to make them farm.

✓ When I was in the UK on my journey with my friend, I would like to sing for them to make them happy.

'UH' is likely a typo for 'UK'. The phrase 'make them farm' is incorrect; it should be 'make them happy'. The sentence uses past tense 'was' correctly but needs correction in vocabulary.

× Yes the I think so because I ruin cans thing.

✓ Yes, I think so because singing is a good thing.

The original sentence is unclear and contains nonsensical words 'ruin cans thing'. It should be restructured to express the intended meaning clearly.

× We don't need to sing apps. Excellently we just the scene what we love to sing and everyone would listen to music during their childhood so Samsung.

✓ We don't need to sing perfectly; we just need to sing what we love. Everyone listens to music during their childhood, so singing is common.

The phrase 'sing apps. Excellently' is incorrect; 'apps' is likely a mishearing of 'perfectly'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs to be simplified. 'Samsung' is unrelated and likely a mispronunciation or error.