Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，影响了表达的自然性和有效性。建议你在回答时注意语法正确，避免重复和断句不当，同时尽量用完整的句子表达观点。

例: I don't really like singing because I'm not confident in my singing ability. However, when I hear a song I enjoy, I often sing along. Overall, I prefer listening to music rather than singing myself.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不连贯，且内容不够具体。建议你使用正确的时态和句型，清晰表达自己的经历和理由，并避免重复和不必要的内容。

例: I have never learned how to sing because when I was a child, I wasn't very interested in music. Even though I like some types of music now, I still haven't taken singing lessons because I don't think it's necessary for me.

提案: 回答中存在语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议你用简单明了的句子表达自己的想法，注意词汇的正确使用和句子结构的完整。

例: Actually, I don't want to sing for anyone because I'm not good at singing and I don't feel relaxed when I sing. If I sing, it's usually just for myself and for fun, not for others.

提案: 回答中语法错误严重，表达混乱，影响理解。建议你简洁明了地表达观点，使用正确的词汇和句子结构，避免断句和拼写错误。

例: I think singing can definitely bring happiness to people. A song usually has fascinating lyrics and melody, and when a singer conveys strong emotions, it makes the listeners feel joyful and moved.

× I'm not really fond of saying because I'm not very confident with my tongue, but if I hear a song which I really like, amazing along with it.

✓ I'm not really fond of singing because I'm not very confident with my tongue, but if I hear a song which I really like, I sing along with it.

这里的短语应为“fond of singing”，动词应使用-ing形式表示喜欢做某事。原句中使用了“saying”，错误地使用了动词原形。

× I haven't done Hussein before because when I was child I'm not very interested in music and even if I find the type of music that I like, I still haven't learn singing.

✓ I haven't done singing before because when I was a child I wasn't very interested in music and even if I found the type of music that I liked, I still haven't learned singing.

时态使用错误。描述过去的情况时，应使用过去时态，如“was a child”，“wasn't interested”，“found”，“liked”。另外，“learn”应为过去分词“learned”以符合完成时态。

× Actually I don't want to sing for anyone.

✓ Actually I don't want to sing to anyone.

动词“sing”后应接介词“to”表示“为某人唱歌”，而不是“for”。

× First of all, I don't worry good at singing and I don't relaxing.

✓ First of all, I'm not good at singing and I don't feel relaxed.

“worry good”错误，应使用形容词“good”修饰主语，“worry”用法不当。第二句中“don't relaxing”语法错误，应改为“don't feel relaxed”或“I am not relaxed”。

× Moreover, I think seeing if I need to sing, if I want to say I think I'm seeing for myself and sing for entertainment, not to others.

✓ Moreover, I think if I need to sing, I sing for myself and for entertainment, not for others.

“seeing”应为“singing”，且句子结构混乱，代词使用不当，需简化并正确使用代词和介词。

× I think seeing can definitely bring companies to people.

✓ I think singing can definitely bring happiness to people.

“seeing”应为“singing”，“companies”应为“happiness”，词汇使用错误。

× Because a song write her red of fascinating lyrics and the. Holidays.

✓ Because a song is made up of fascinating lyrics and melodies.

句子结构混乱，词汇错误，“write her red”无意义，应改为“is made up of”，并正确表达“歌词和旋律”。

× Then the singer convey it to the audience. With strong emotion which makes the listener fill in drive in dry and driver.

✓ Then the singer conveys it to the audience with strong emotion, which makes the listeners feel inspired and moved.

句子结构不完整，动词单复数不一致，“convey”应为“conveys”，表达不清晰，“fill in drive in dry and driver”无意义，应改为“feel inspired and moved”。