Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using simple and correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, directly say you don't like singing because you think your voice is not good, but you tried it as a new experience.

例: No, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not very good. However, I tried singing once just to have a new experience.

提案: Make your answer more coherent and logical by using linking words and clearer sentences. Directly answer the question and explain your preference with specific reasons.

例: No, I have never learnt how to sing because I prefer doing other activities. I don't think I have the talent for singing.

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid unclear or incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details.

例: I don't want to sing for anyone because I don't enjoy singing much. I prefer listening to music or dancing instead.

提案: Improve clarity and coherence by organizing your ideas logically and avoiding repetition. Use linking words and give specific examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. Many people, especially Italians, like to sing to express their feelings and improve their mood.

× No, because I don't find my voice that good to be singing at singing specifically.

✓ No, because I don't find my voice good enough to sing specifically.

The phrase 'to be singing at singing' is incorrect. After 'find my voice that good', the correct form is 'to sing' (infinitive), not 'to be singing' (verb + -ing form). Also, 'that good' should be 'good enough' for clarity.

× But I had to try it.

✓ But I have to try it.

The sentence refers to a current or general situation, so present tense 'have to' is appropriate instead of past tense 'had to'.

× I wait.

✓ I wait.

The sentence 'I wait.' is incomplete or unclear in context. It might be a fragment or misused word. However, without more context, no correction is made.

× Just a new experience.

✓ It's just a new experience.

The phrase 'Just a new experience.' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It's' completes the sentence.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

Both 'learnt' and 'learned' are acceptable past participles, but 'learned' is more common in American English. No strict error here, but 'learned' is preferred.

× No, I just prefer doing different activities in set instead I think.

✓ No, I just prefer doing different activities instead, I think.

The phrase 'in set' is unclear and likely incorrect. Removing 'in set' clarifies the sentence. Also, adding a comma before 'I think' improves readability.

× Singing has it people, and I just don't think that I am a one of these people.

✓ Singing has its people, and I just don't think that I am one of those people.

'Has it people' is incorrect; it should be 'has its people'. Also, 'a one of these people' is incorrect; correct form is 'one of those people'.

× But. Yes, that's it.

✓ But yes, that's it.

Fragmented sentence 'But.' should be combined with the next sentence for proper structure.

× No one actually, but singing is not appealing for me and I just enjoy you singing in the shower of that count.

✓ No one actually, but singing is not appealing to me and I just enjoy singing in the shower, if that counts.

'Appealing for me' should be 'appealing to me'. 'I just enjoy you singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I just enjoy singing'. 'Of that count' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'if that counts'.

× Just thinking along syncing and dancing.

✓ I just enjoy thinking along, singing, and dancing.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding subject and correcting 'syncing' to 'singing' clarifies meaning.

× That, that, that.

✓ That, that, that.

This phrase is unclear and does not form a proper sentence. No correction possible without context.

× Yes, I strongly stand with this opinion.

✓ Yes, I strongly agree with this opinion.

The phrase 'stand with this opinion' is awkward. The correct expression is 'agree with this opinion'.

× People expressed their feelings through songs and people, and most people, and mostly from Italian.

✓ People express their feelings through songs, and most people, especially Italians, do so.

The sentence is repetitive and unclear. 'People expressed' should be present tense 'express' to match context. 'Mostly from Italian' is incorrect; should be 'especially Italians'.

× Italian people always like to sing to express their feelings and change their mood.

✓ Italian people always like to sing to express their feelings and change their moods.

'Mood' should be plural 'moods' to match 'their feelings' and generalize the statement.

× Just like most comma.

✓ Just like most people.

'Comma' is incorrect here; likely a mishearing or typo. Correct word is 'people'.