Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'singing' instead of 'seeing'). Also, keep your answer concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. However, I know my voice isn't very strong, so I usually prefer listening to others sing.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, and provide specific supporting details using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

例: Although my university major was speech and language pathology, which involved studying voices, I have never taken formal singing classes.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, correct minor grammar errors and avoid redundancy.

例: If I ever sing for someone, it would be my sister because she supports me and encourages me to take singing classes to improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and concisely, using linking words to connect your points logically. Use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it creates a pleasant atmosphere for both the singer and the listeners, especially when singing with others.

× my voice isn't so good for as singing

✓ my voice isn't so good for singing

The phrase 'for as singing' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use here is 'for' followed directly by the gerund 'singing'. The word 'as' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× I prefer to hear other people's thinking

✓ I prefer to hear other people's singing

The word 'thinking' is incorrect here because the context is about singing. The correct noun should relate to singing, so 'singing' is appropriate. Also, 'hear other people's singing' makes sense in this context.

× I think seeing is one of the most difficult talents in humans

✓ I think singing is one of the most difficult talents in humans

The word 'seeing' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'singing'. 'Seeing' does not fit the context of talents related to voice or music.

× my carrier in university was speech and language pathology's major parts of my carrier include a singing and different things about voices

✓ my career in university was speech and language pathology; major parts of my career include singing and different things about voices

The word 'carrier' is a misspelling of 'career'. Also, the possessive form 'pathology's' is incorrect here; it should be 'pathology'. The phrase 'a singing' is incorrect; 'singing' should be used without 'a'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I don't register in singing classes

✓ I haven't registered in singing classes

The verb 'register' should be in the present perfect tense 'haven't registered' to indicate an action that has not happened up to now. Also, the preposition 'in' is correct here.

× If I want to sing for someone one day I will sing for my sister because she doesn't judge me even if my voice is bad

✓ If I want to sing for someone one day, I will sing for my sister because she doesn't judge me even if my voice is bad

A comma is needed after the introductory clause 'If I want to sing for someone one day' to separate it from the main clause. The pronouns are used correctly here.

× she encouraged me to go for a singing classes and improve my skills

✓ she encouraged me to go to singing classes and improve my skills

The preposition 'to go for' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'to go to'. Also, 'a singing classes' is incorrect because 'classes' is plural and should not have the article 'a'.

× if someone know how to sing for other people, it can bring happiness for him or for her

✓ if someone knows how to sing for other people, it can bring happiness to him or her

The verb 'know' should be 'knows' to agree with the singular subject 'someone'. Also, the preposition 'for' should be 'to' when expressing the recipient of happiness. The phrase 'for him or for her' is better as 'to him or her'.

× it provides a very pleasant environment even for themselves and for other people

✓ it provides a very pleasant environment even for themselves and others

The phrase 'for other people' is redundant after 'for themselves'. Using 'others' is more concise and natural. The preposition 'for' is correct here.

× and singing with others as actually bring

✓ and singing with others actually brings happiness

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. The phrase 'as actually bring' is incorrect. The corrected sentence completes the thought and uses the correct verb form 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'.