Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your opinion and supporting it with clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: I don't like singing because I think my voice isn't very good. However, I enjoy listening to others sing because it creates a pleasant atmosphere and a sense of connection among people.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details. Use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas effectively.

例: Yes, I took some singing lessons when I was at university because it was related to my major in speech-language pathology. However, I didn't pursue it seriously because I wanted to focus on other areas.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and correct sentence structures to improve clarity.

例: If I were to sing for someone, I would choose my sister because she is very supportive and never judges me. She even encouraged me to take singing classes, although I am not very interested in pursuing singing seriously.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is difficult to understand due to grammar and vocabulary errors. Try to express your opinion clearly with proper sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. When talented singers perform and receive encouragement from others, it boosts their confidence and brings joy both to themselves and their audience.

× Actually, not because my voice isn't so good for singing, but I like when people singing around me and it feels very good that you can sync with all of the people around you in your environment.

✓ Actually, not because my voice isn't so good for singing, but I like when people are singing around me and it feels very good that you can sync with all of the people around you in your environment.

The verb 'singing' needs an auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present continuous tense 'are singing' to indicate an ongoing action. Without 'are', 'people singing' is incorrect here.

× Ah, in the past, when I was a student in university, because I was a speech language pathology is a major part of my carrier belong to a sings invoices, but if we want to be perfectionist in singing note.

✓ Ah, in the past, when I was a student at university, because speech-language pathology was a major part of my career related to singing, but if we want to be perfectionists in singing, note.

The original sentence has multiple issues including incorrect tense and word choice. 'Was' is the correct past tense of 'is' to match 'in the past'. 'Carrier' should be 'career'. 'Belong to a sings invoices' is unclear and corrected to 'related to singing'. 'Perfectionist' should be plural 'perfectionists' to agree with 'we'.

× If I want to sing for a someone I will sing for my sister because she doesn't judge me.

✓ If I want to sing for someone, I will sing for my sister because she doesn't judge me.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'someone'. 'Someone' is an indefinite pronoun and does not require an article.

× An she also encouraged me to improve my singing.

✓ And she also encouraged me to improve my singing.

The word 'An' is a misspelling of the conjunction 'And' which is used to connect clauses.

× An I know that she encouraged me to register in singing classes at this point that it's not my interest.

✓ And I know that she encouraged me to register in singing classes, but at this point, it's not my interest.

The sentence needs a conjunction 'but' to contrast the ideas properly. Also, 'at this point that it's not my interest' is awkward and corrected to 'but at this point, it's not my interest'.

× Actually I think if someone know how to singing, yes, I think when a people who has talent for singing seeing for all of the people and then they encourage him to singing more, it can bring hapiness for him or for her.

✓ Actually, I think if someone knows how to sing, yes, I think when people who have talent for singing perform for all of the people and then they are encouraged to sing more, it can bring happiness to him or her.

'Know' should be 'knows' for third person singular. 'How to singing' should be 'how to sing' because 'to' is followed by base verb. 'A people' is incorrect; 'people' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Seeing for all of the people' is incorrect; 'perform for all of the people' is better. 'Encourage him to singing' should be 'are encouraged to sing' to use correct verb forms. 'Hapiness' is misspelled as 'happiness'.