Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I can sing different types of songs like Punjabi, our English songs,' say 'I enjoy singing various types of songs, including Punjabi and English.' Also, correct 'comfort table' to 'comfortable.'

例: Yes, I enjoy singing various types of songs, including Punjabi and English. However, I mostly prefer singing Punjabi songs because they make me feel more comfortable and connected to my culture.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'Yes, I learned how to sing during my school days, which helped me improve my vocal skills.'

例: Yes, I learned how to sing during my school days. This training helped me improve my vocal skills and gain confidence in singing.

提案: Your answer is confusing and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear response with specific details. For example, say 'I would like to sing for my family because they always support me.' Avoid unclear phrases and focus on clarity.

例: I would like to sing for my family because they always support and encourage me, and singing for them would make me happy.

提案: Your answer is partially clear but needs better structure and vocabulary. Use linking words and specific examples. For instance, say 'Yes, definitely. Singing can bring happiness because many people enjoy singing or listening to songs when they feel stressed or face difficult situations.'

例: Yes, definitely. Singing can bring happiness because many people enjoy singing or listening to songs when they feel stressed or face difficult situations. It helps them relax and feel better.

× When I sing Punjabi song I feel more comfort table.

✓ When I sing Punjabi songs, I feel more comfortable.

The word 'comfort table' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'comfortable' to describe a feeling. Also, 'Punjabi song' should be plural 'Punjabi songs' to match the context. Adding a comma after the introductory clause improves sentence clarity.

× In my school time I learned how to sing so also I prove I improve my vocal.

✓ In my school time, I learned how to sing and also proved that I improved my vocals.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'Prove' should be past tense 'proved' to match 'learned'. 'Improve' should be past tense 'improved'. 'Vocal' should be plural 'vocals' to refer to singing ability. Adding 'and' connects the ideas properly.

× Who do you want to sing for? It reminded I want to do want to think because he is a professional singer so he want to miss.

✓ I remember I want to sing for him because he is a professional singer, so I don't want to miss the chance.

The original sentence is unclear and has pronoun misuse. 'It reminded' is incorrect; 'I remember' is appropriate. 'Do want to think' is confusing; 'want to sing for him' clarifies intent. 'He want' should be 'he wants' for subject-verb agreement. The phrase 'so he want to miss' is unclear; corrected to 'so I don't want to miss the chance' to convey meaning.

× So whenever mostly people like to think when they are in distress or any other difficult situation.

✓ So, whenever people are in distress or any other difficult situation, they mostly like to sing.

The sentence structure is incorrect and confusing. 'Like to think' should be 'like to sing' to match the context. The placement of 'mostly' is awkward; placing it before 'like to sing' clarifies meaning. Rearranging the sentence improves clarity and flow.