Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "I like singing because it helps me relax and relieves my stress." Also, avoid unnecessary phrases like "I would like to see it in my own way."

例: I like singing because it helps me relax and relieves my stress when I feel overwhelmed.

提案: In English (Cambodia), focus on using correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Instead of "I never learn how to sing," say "I have never learned how to sing." Also, avoid unclear phrases like "I choose that I would."

例: I have never learned how to sing, but I would like to learn in the future.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to express your ideas clearly and use simple sentences. The current answer is confusing. You can say, "I want to sing for my mom and my boyfriend because I want to show my feelings to them."

例: I want to sing for my mom and my boyfriend to express my feelings and make them happy.

提案: In English (Cambodia), use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Avoid unclear names like "Tom" unless necessary. You can say, "Yes, singing can bring happiness because music helps people feel joyful and reduces their stress from work."

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because music helps people feel joyful and reduces their stress from work.

× I like singing's because it gives me some rest and keep me up stressing when I'm stressing so I would like to see it in my own way.

✓ I like singing because it gives me some rest and keeps me from stressing when I'm stressed, so I would like to see it in my own way.

The use of 'singing's' is incorrect; 'singing' as a gerund does not need an apostrophe. Also, 'keep' should be 'keeps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'keep me up stressing' is awkward; 'keeps me from stressing' is clearer. 'When I'm stressing' should be 'when I'm stressed' to correctly express the state.

× I never learn how to sing, but I will.

✓ I have never learned how to sing, but I will.

The verb 'learn' should be in the present perfect tense 'have learned' to indicate an action that has not happened up to now. 'Never learn' is incorrect in this context.

× I choose that I would.

✓ I choose to do so.

The phrase 'I choose that I would' is incorrect. 'Choose' is usually followed by 'to' plus verb. 'I choose to do so' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I would like to learn in the future.

✓ I would like to learn in the future.

This sentence is correct and fits the future tense context; no correction needed.

× Probably I went to sing for my mom appearing in my boyfriend.

✓ Probably I want to sing for my mom and my boyfriend.

'Went' is past tense but the intended meaning is present or future desire, so 'want' is appropriate. 'Appearing in my boyfriend' is unclear and incorrect; likely intended to say 'and my boyfriend'.

× It was things the stone can impress my feeling for them.

✓ It is something that can express my feelings for them.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It is something that can express my feelings for them' is a clearer and grammatically correct sentence.

× Yes, of course singing can bring happiness to people because music can make Tom happy an don't make them all sad and stressing with their work.

✓ Yes, of course singing can bring happiness to people because music can make them happy and doesn't make them sad or stressed with their work.

'Tom' is likely a typo for 'them'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'Don't' should be 'doesn't' to agree with singular subject 'music'. 'Sad and stressing' should be 'sad or stressed' for correct adjective use.

× So singing can make them happiness.

✓ So singing can make them happy.

'Happiness' is a noun; the adjective 'happy' should be used here to describe the effect on 'them'.