Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions. For example, when I am alone at home, I often play the guitar and sing to relax. Singing has become an important part of my life.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Provide a clear and concise response with correct verb tenses. Use linking words to explain your learning experience and improvements.

例: Yes, I started learning how to sing when I was 15 years old. I went to a studio where I practiced regularly. As a result, my singing skills improved significantly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Directly answer the question and explain your reason with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I want to sing for myself because I enjoy expressing my feelings through music. Watching singing videos on TikTok inspired me to start singing on my own.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons why singing brings happiness.

例: Definitely, singing brings happiness to many people because it is a powerful form of expression. For me, singing helps me relax and feel better, so I believe it benefits everyone.

× I like him a lot of magic in singing because soon it's my emotion and singing is my everything I.

✓ I like a lot of magic in singing because it expresses my emotions and singing is my everything.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'him' instead of 'a lot of' and has unclear pronoun references. 'Him' is a pronoun referring to a person, which is incorrect here. Also, 'soon it's my emotion' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses appropriate pronouns.

× When I was in home alone, I mean playing guitar and singing alone at home she needs.

✓ When I was home alone, I played guitar and sang alone at home; it was my need.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect pronoun 'she needs' which does not fit the context. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and corrects pronoun usage.

× My part of life.

✓ It is a part of my life.

The original sentence is a fragment without a verb. Adding 'It is' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× Yes, I learn how to sing when I'm 15 years old.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was 15 years old.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned'. Also, 'I'm' should be 'I was' to match past tense.

× I I was going to. I was going to. Studio and I will learn and I practice dear how to singing and my bubble is so improved after didn't practice.

✓ I was going to the studio to learn and practice singing, and my ability improved a lot after practicing.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repeated phrases and incorrect verb forms. The correction combines ideas into a coherent sentence with correct verb tenses and forms.

× Oh I want to sing for myself because I was TikTok videos when every singles are singing and then singing videos are coming.

✓ Oh, I want to sing for myself because I watch TikTok videos where many singers are singing and new singing videos keep coming.

The original sentence misuses 'was' instead of 'watch' and 'every singles' which is incorrect plural form. The correction uses correct verb tense and plural noun form.

× And then we started to myself or singing. Wow.

✓ And then I started singing by myself. Wow.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrectly structured. The correction clarifies the subject and verb usage.

× Definitely is singing brings happiness and every in people because seeing is most powerful.

✓ Definitely, singing brings happiness to everyone because singing is very powerful.

The original sentence misuses 'is singing brings' and 'every in people'. The correction removes unnecessary modal verb 'is' and corrects noun phrases.

× Singing makes me relax and make feel better.

✓ Singing makes me relax and feel better.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'make' instead of 'makes' or omits the subject. The correction uses parallel verb forms after 'makes'.

× And then I think it is very benefit for every people.

✓ And then I think it is very beneficial for everyone.

The original sentence uses 'benefit' (a noun) instead of 'beneficial' (an adjective) and 'every people' which is incorrect; 'everyone' is the correct pronoun.