Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite repetitive and unclear, which affects the natural flow and effectiveness. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by concise supporting details without repeating phrases. Also, avoid unclear or incorrect words to make your answer more natural and understandable.

例: I enjoy singing, especially when I am alone, because it helps me relax and express my feelings. However, I am not very confident in my singing skills, so I usually sing just for fun.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, be specific about your experiences and avoid repeating the same phrases.

例: When I was a child, I wanted to learn singing and play the guitar, but I never had the chance because I was busy with my studies and sports. Therefore, I focused more on sports than music during that time.

提案: Your answer shows your feelings but is repetitive and lacks clarity. Use a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating the same ideas. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and specific.

例: If I ever get the chance to sing for someone special, I would dedicate a song to my mother to make her feel appreciated. I believe a heartfelt performance would brighten her day, and I hope to do that someday.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, be specific about how singing brings happiness.

例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people because it is a form of art that allows individuals to express their emotions, such as love and care. Moreover, singing can create a joyful atmosphere and strengthen bonds among loved ones.

× I am a very terrible single.

✓ I am a very terrible singer.

The word 'single' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'singer' to describe someone who sings. This is an incorrect use of adjectives or nouns leading to confusion.

× More like off a bathroom single.

✓ More like off a bathroom singer.

Again, 'single' is incorrect; it should be 'singer'. This is a misuse of the noun form, which affects the meaning.

× It really strays it really it really releases next race.

✓ It really relaxes me; it really releases stress.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. The intended meaning seems to be that singing relaxes and relieves stress. Correct sentence structure and word choice are needed for clarity.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is acceptable in British English, but 'learned' is more common in other varieties. Since the rest of the transcript uses standard forms, 'learned' is preferred here for consistency.

× I really wanted to have some, I really wanted to build my interests and music in singing or playing guitar.

✓ I really wanted to develop my interests in music, singing, or playing the guitar.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Correct sentence structure and preposition use improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I was more into sports then I was in into the into singing.

✓ I was more into sports than I was into singing.

The phrase 'then I was in into the into singing' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'than' for comparison and 'into' for interest. Removing extra words clarifies the sentence.

× If I would ever given a chance chance to sing for someone that would be remembered though.

✓ If I were ever given a chance to sing for someone memorable, I would do it.

The original sentence has incorrect conditional structure and repetition. Using the correct conditional form 'If I were given' and removing repeated words improves grammar and clarity.

× I really want to dedicate a song to her because I really really want to dedicate a song to her as I want to make her feel special.

✓ I really want to dedicate a song to her because I want to make her feel special.

The sentence is repetitive. Removing the repeated phrase improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think a special performance for her would make her day and I will really try one day to do that.

✓ I think a special performance for her would make her day, and I will really try to do that one day.

The phrase 'try one day to do that' is awkward. Correct placement of 'one day' after 'try to do that' improves sentence flow.

× It is not just a source of recreation, it is it is it is a singing.

✓ It is not just a source of recreation; it is singing.

The phrase 'it is it is it is a singing' is incorrect and redundant. Removing extra words and the article 'a' before 'singing' corrects the sentence.

× Singing and songs are of other type of art is a is a mean to show your emotions, to express your love, failings, love, care towards it with your loved 1.

✓ Singing and songs are another type of art; they are a means to show your emotions, to express your feelings, love, and care towards your loved ones.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'of other type' should be 'another type'; 'is a is a mean' should be 'are a means'; 'failings' is incorrect, should be 'feelings'; 'loved 1' is a typo for 'loved ones'. Correcting these improves grammar and meaning.