Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Avoid filler phrases such as 'you know'.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. Additionally, I love listening to music, which enhances my mood and expresses my feelings.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Provide a direct response first, then explain your opinion clearly with correct grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing, but I wish I had the opportunity. However, I believe that formal singing lessons are not necessary to enjoy music or improve singing skills.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Make sure to answer directly and clearly. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. For example, clarify who you want to sing for and why, and avoid unrelated or unclear words.

例: I like to sing for my daughter because she is my best friend. Especially when she is going to sleep, I sing lullabies to help her relax.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about how singing affects mood. Avoid vague phrases like 'import mode'.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it can change a person's mood. For example, when I feel stressed, I listen to soothing and relaxing music, which helps me feel happier.

× I do like singing, the main reasons it's give me some relaxation, you know, it's helped me to get out of my stress and give what exactly my vibe is.

✓ I do like singing; the main reason is it gives me some relaxation, you know, it has helped me to get out of my stress and express exactly what my vibe is.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'give' instead of 'gives' which is the correct third person singular present tense form. Also, 'reasons' should be singular 'reason' to match the singular verb 'is'. The phrase 'give what exactly my vibe is' is unclear and corrected to 'express exactly what my vibe is' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And I love to listen music to not only singing.

✓ And I love to listen to music, not only singing.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object. The phrase 'to listen music' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to music'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× No, unfortunately I didn't get any chance to.

✓ No, unfortunately I haven't gotten any chance to.

The present perfect tense 'have gotten' is more appropriate here to indicate an experience up to the present moment rather than a simple past action.

× You learn singing, but I wish I could.

✓ You can learn singing, but I wish I could.

The original sentence lacks a modal verb to express ability or possibility. Adding 'can' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'learn singing' is awkward; 'learn to sing' would be better, but as per instructions, only correcting grammar problem types listed.

× I don't singing is a very worst area of study.

✓ I think singing is a very bad area of study.

The phrase 'I don't singing' is ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'I think singing'. 'Very worst' is incorrect; 'worst' is a superlative and does not take 'very'. 'Very bad' is the correct form here.

× I think it's not important to study about singing to get now to music because.

✓ I think it's not important to study singing to get to know music because.

The phrase 'study about singing' is incorrect; 'study singing' is correct. Also, 'get now to music' is likely a typo for 'get to know music'. The preposition 'to' is necessary after 'get' in this context.

× I always like to sing for my knees.

✓ I always like to sing for my niece.

'Knees' is a homophone error; the correct word is 'niece', referring to a female relative.

× She's my best friend. She's my first kid.

✓ She's my best friend. She's my first child.

'First kid' is informal; 'first child' is more appropriate. However, this is more style than grammar. The main issue is clarity; 'first kid' can be confusing.

× When? I'm a Co sleep.

✓ When I'm asleep.

'I'm a Co sleep' is ungrammatical and unclear. It is corrected to 'When I'm asleep' to make sense in context.

× I always seen some lippies.

✓ I always sing some lullabies.

'Seen' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'sing'. 'Lippies' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'lullabies'. This correction aligns with the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think singing has a special ability to change the mood of a person.

✓ Yes, I think singing has a special ability to change the mood of a person.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× So the kind of music I was listening with change according to my mood.

✓ So the kind of music I was listening to changes according to my mood.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to', not 'with'. Also, subject-verb agreement corrected from 'change' to 'changes'.

× And if I'm an import mode, I'll select some soothing, relaxing at the same time happy mood music.

✓ And if I'm in an important mood, I'll select some soothing, relaxing, and at the same time happy mood music.

'Import mode' is a typo for 'important mood'. The preposition 'in' is necessary before 'an important mood'. Also, commas added for clarity in the list of adjectives.