Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和不相关内容，直接回答问题并给出具体原因。

例: No, I don't like singing because I'm not confident in my singing skills and I feel shy singing in front of others.

提案: 回答较为直接，但表达不够自然，建议使用更地道的表达方式，并补充一些细节使回答更丰富。

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I feel too self-conscious to sing when others are around.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，内容重复且不连贯，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连词连接句子。

例: I usually prefer to listen to music alone in my room because I feel uncomfortable singing in front of others.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，建议用更准确的词汇表达观点，并简洁说明原因。

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it releases chemicals in the brain that improve mood and reduce stress.

× I'm not very fun of staining because I'm not good at singing anything and I'm an introverted person.

✓ I'm not very fond of singing because I'm not good at singing anything and I'm an introverted person.

这里的错误是“fun”用作形容词表示“有趣的”，但表达喜欢某事时应使用“fond of”。因此应改为“fond of”表示喜欢。

× No matter who he has, no matter who they are, no matter who is occurring turns or just a stranger.

✓ No matter who they are, whether they are acquaintances or just strangers.

原句中代词使用混乱且句子结构不完整，导致意思不清。应统一使用“they”指代不特定的人，并简化句子结构。

× Well, actually I don't.

✓ Well, actually I haven't.

回答“Have you ever learnt how to sing?”时，使用现在完成时更合适，表示从过去到现在的经历。原句用一般现在时不符合语境。

× I never learned how to sing because I think it is impossible for me to sing the song when there is someone around me.

✓ I have never learned how to sing because I think it is impossible for me to sing a song when there is someone around me.

“never learned”应使用现在完成时“have never learned”，表示从过去到现在的经历。

× I don't want to sing a when someone just around me and because I'm an introverted person, I'm not very good at singing when someone else around me.

✓ I don't want to sing when someone is just around me, and because I'm an introverted person, I'm not very good at singing when someone else is around me.

原句中“a”多余且“someone just around me”缺少动词，应补充“is”使句子完整。

× So I prefer enjoy the music alone. Listen to music in my bedroom instead of seeing your son in an formal.

✓ So I prefer to enjoy music alone, listening to music in my bedroom instead of singing in public.

“prefer enjoy”应为“prefer to enjoy”，动词不定式形式；“seeing your son in an formal”语义不明，推测为“singing in public”更符合语境。

× I will definitely be.

✓ I definitely will.

“I will definitely be”不完整，缺少谓语内容。应改为“I definitely will”表示肯定回答。

× A lot of people are very fun of singing.

✓ A lot of people are very fond of singing.

同前，“fun”用法错误，应为“fond of”表示喜欢。

× I suppose it can be traced back to to chemical elements and duffer means in our brains that has its unique function of the whole system to make people feel happy and put them into a better mood.

✓ I suppose it can be traced back to chemical elements and different means in our brains that have unique functions in the whole system to make people feel happy and put them in a better mood.

“to to”重复，应删去一个；“duffer means”应为“different means”；“has”应改为“have”与复数主语一致；“put them into a better mood”改为“put them in a better mood”更自然。