Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh các lỗi như 'had me relaxed' (nên là 'helps me relax'). Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói rõ hơn về cách hát giúp bạn thư giãn và kết nối với mọi người.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, when I feel stressed, singing my favorite songs always brings a smile to my face and makes me feel happier. Moreover, singing is a great way to connect with others during social gatherings.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi chính tả như 'thought' thay vì 'taught', 'buren' không rõ nghĩa. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết giữa các ý. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về lợi ích khi học hát.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in school, I took part in a choir where the music teacher taught us basic singing techniques. This helped me improve my voice control and gain more confidence when performing in front of others.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần được sắp xếp lại cho rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lỗi chính tả như 'send' thay vì 'sing'.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because it feels more personal. They know me well and always appreciate my efforts, which makes me feel more confident. Moreover, their support and encouragement help me enjoy the experience even more.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'oppress' (nên là 'express'), 'stuff' không phù hợp. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Absolutely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. It allows individuals to express their emotions freely and is an effective way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, whether alone or with friends.

× Singing yes, I really enjoy singing because it had me relaxed and expressed my emotions.

✓ Singing yes, I really enjoy singing because it has me relaxed and expresses my emotions.

The original sentence uses 'had' and 'expressed' which are past tense forms, but the context requires present tense to match 'I really enjoy'. The verbs should be in present tense 'has' and 'expresses' to correctly describe ongoing effects.

× For a sample.

✓ For example.

'For a sample' is incorrect and should be 'For example' to introduce an example properly.

× When I feel stressed singing my favorite songs on Weibring am smile to my face and makes me feel happier.

✓ When I feel stressed, singing my favorite songs brings a smile to my face and makes me feel happier.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words like 'Weibring am'. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct verb usage.

× Additionally, singing a great way to connect with others during social gatherings.

✓ Additionally, singing is a great way to connect with others during social gatherings.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' which is necessary to complete the sentence structure.

× When I was in school I took part in a choir where the music teacher thought of basic singing techniques.

✓ When I was in school I took part in a choir where the music teacher taught basic singing techniques.

The verb 'thought' is incorrect here; the correct past tense verb is 'taught' meaning to instruct.

× This is buren help me improve my voice control and gain more confidence when performing in Vernon up others.

✓ This has been helping me improve my voice control and gain more confidence when performing in front of others.

The original sentence contains unclear words 'buren' and 'Vernon up' and incorrect tense. It needs correction for clarity and proper verb tense.

× Sing for I would like to send for my family and close friends because it feels more personal in men, therefore they know me well an always appreciate my efforts which makes me feel more confident more over the support and encouragement.

✓ I would like to sing for my family and close friends because it feels more personal to me; therefore, they know me well and always appreciate my efforts, which makes me feel more confident. Moreover, the support and encouragement help me enjoy the experience even more.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage ('Sing for I'), unclear phrases ('in men'), and run-on structure. It needs rephrasing for correct pronouns, clarity, and sentence separation.

× Have enjoyed the experience even more.

✓ I have enjoyed the experience even more.

The sentence lacks a subject 'I' which is necessary for a complete sentence.

× It allows individuals to oppress their emotions freely and stuff at an effective way to relieve stress for a sample.

✓ It allows individuals to express their emotions freely and serves as an effective way to relieve stress, for example.

The word 'oppress' is incorrect; it should be 'express'. 'Stuff' is unclear and replaced with 'serves as'. 'For a sample' is corrected to 'for example'.

× Many people feel uplifted and joyful when they send their favorite songs, whether alone or with friends, which may improve.

✓ Many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, whether alone or with friends, which may improve their mood.

The verb 'send' is incorrect; it should be 'sing'. The sentence is incomplete and needs an object after 'improve'.