Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid redundancy. Use simple and correct sentences to express your opinion naturally.

例: I don't consider myself a good singer because I lack natural talent. However, I really enjoy listening to my friends and family when they sing because they have beautiful voices.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and fragmented. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid grammatical mistakes and be more specific.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing because I don't have much talent for it. However, I once tried to learn the piano, but it didn't work out as I expected.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly with complete sentences and use linking words to connect your thoughts. Be specific about your feelings and intentions.

例: I would like to sing for my future baby, especially lullabies. Singing to my child would be a special way to show my love and create lasting memories.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is fragmented and contains unclear phrases. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer coherent and natural. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Absolutely, singing can bring happiness because it helps release stress and improve your mood. For example, singing during difficult times can uplift your spirits and make you feel better.

× Well it is a person who don't have a gifted ways.

✓ Well, it is a person who doesn't have gifted ways.

The subject 'person' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' instead of 'don't' to agree in number. Also, 'ways' should be plural without 'a' before it, so 'gifted ways' is correct.

× I really enjoy singing of my friends or my families who have a beautiful voice and I think it is special to have this.

✓ I really enjoy the singing of my friends or my family who have beautiful voices, and I think it is special to have this.

The preposition 'of' is correct here, but 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring collectively. Also, 'voice' should be plural 'voices' because it refers to multiple people. Adding 'the' before 'singing' specifies the activity.

× Well, unfortunately not because I have no voice and talent for that, but the one time I try to use instruments such as a piano but.

✓ Well, unfortunately not because I have no voice and talent for that, but one time I tried to use instruments such as a piano.

The verb 'try' should be in past tense 'tried' to match the past time reference 'one time'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and had an unnecessary 'but' at the end, which was removed for clarity.

× I it didn't work out.

✓ It didn't work out.

The extra pronoun 'I' is unnecessary and causes confusion. Removing it corrects the sentence structure.

× Well, I prefer singing for my future baby. I like to sing to them.

✓ Well, I prefer singing for my future baby. I like to sing to him or her.

The pronoun 'them' is plural, but 'baby' is singular. Using 'him or her' matches the singular noun.

× A lullaby or something is special to Remember Me as a mom.

✓ A lullaby or something is special to remember me as a mom.

'Remember' should not be capitalized here as it is part of the sentence, and 'Remember Me' is incorrect as a phrase. Lowercase 'remember me' is correct.

× In terror. Mines.

✓ In terror, mine.

The original phrase is unclear and fragmented. Possibly intended as 'In terror, mine' or 'In terror, mine is...'. Without more context, correcting to a coherent phrase is difficult, but the original is fragmented and incorrect.

× Absolutely yes, singing can improve your. Mood where? Releasing your stress. During. Service full moments of your life and it can uplift your mood.

✓ Absolutely yes, singing can improve your mood by releasing your stress during stressful moments of your life, and it can uplift your mood.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains misplaced punctuation. Combining the fragments into a coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.