Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý tưởng không được truyền đạt một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách ngắn gọn và mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: No, I don't like singing because I think my voice sounds bad. For example, when I listen to recordings of myself singing, I feel embarrassed. Therefore, I usually avoid singing in public.

提案: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm rõ ý kiến của bạn.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I think my voice is not good. Whenever I listen to recordings of myself singing, it sounds terrible. So, I prefer not to take singing lessons.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng cung cấp một câu trả lời rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn.

例: I don't usually sing for others because I am not confident about my voice. However, if I had to sing, I would sing for my close friends or family.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi nhưng câu trả lời còn lủng củng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý kiến của mình.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because many songs are fun and uplifting. For example, singing popular songs at parties often makes people feel joyful and relaxed.

× Well, I don't like singing because I think that my voice is really bad and singing when I recorded on my phone is really, absolutely, it is really terrible.

✓ Well, I don't like singing because I think that my voice is really bad and singing when I am recorded on my phone is really, absolutely, it is really terrible.

The phrase 'singing when I recorded on my phone' is incorrect because 'recorded' is the past tense, but the intended meaning is the action happening to the speaker's voice being recorded. The correct form is 'when I am recorded' using the passive voice in present tense to indicate the ongoing action.

× Well, I think that I never have and I never, never, never.

✓ Well, I think that I never have and I never, never, never have.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb at the end. Adding 'have' completes the present perfect structure indicating the speaker has never done something.

× And I always say, swear to God, never sing again.

✓ And I always say, swear to God, I will never sing again.

The sentence lacks a modal verb to express future intention. Adding 'I will' clarifies the promise or intention not to sing again.

× Well, I never learned how to say because I think that my.

✓ Well, I never learned how to sing because I think that my.

The verb 'say' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'sing' to match the topic. 'Learned' is correctly in past tense.

× Voice sounds quite bad and whenever I listen to recordings of myself singing on my phone it filters sound terrible.

✓ My voice sounds quite bad and whenever I listen to recordings of myself singing on my phone, it sounds terrible.

The sentence lacks the possessive pronoun 'my' before 'voice' and misuses 'filters' instead of 'sounds'. Correct pronouns and verbs improve clarity.

× Why Is surely if I sing in perfect or even at home?

✓ Why is it surely perfect if I sing, even at home?

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Reordering and adding 'it' clarifies the question about singing perfectly at home.

× Well. Yeah, no, I never sing, but I usually I want to sing from myself to hear 'cause I think my voice is really bad on phone.

✓ Well, yeah, no, I never sing, but I usually want to sing for myself to hear because I think my voice sounds really bad on the phone.

Corrected verb forms and prepositions improve sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But I think that I have a tattoo to say also.

✓ But I think that I have a talent to say also.

The word 'tattoo' is incorrect here; likely intended 'talent'. Also, 'to say' is unclear; possibly 'to sing' or 'to say' is intended. Assuming 'talent' is correct.

× I think the singing can bring happiness to people because there are some song is really, really.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because some songs are really, really.

Removed 'the' before 'singing' as it is used in a general sense. Corrected plural form 'songs' and verb agreement.

× Fun and bring people happiness so yeah, I think the same can bring happiness to people ask this so.

✓ Fun and bring people happiness, so yeah, I think the same can bring happiness to people as well.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reordering and adding conjunctions improve clarity and grammatical correctness.