Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on clear and concise sentences, avoid redundancy, and use appropriate vocabulary. For example, instead of 'as sturdily' and 'very strong', use more precise words like 'effectively' and 'uplifting music'. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and ensure it flows naturally.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing as a hobby because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I often listen to uplifting music while singing, which boosts my mood and recharges my energy for the rest of the day.

提案: Your response has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'Leader by literary'. To improve, answer directly with correct grammar, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific details about how you practice singing.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing because I enjoy it casually as a hobby. However, I try to improve my skills by regularly singing along to my favorite songs, which helps me get better over time.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but contains incomplete sentences and unclear expressions like 'so N things' and 'oh all the song'. To improve, complete your sentences, use linking words, and be specific about why singing for your mother is meaningful.

例: I want to sing for everyone around me, especially my mother. For example, I often practice songs about mothers during my free time because singing helps me express my feelings to her, and these songs are very meaningful.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but contains minor errors like 'realize' instead of 'relax' and 'hapiness' instead of 'happiness'. To improve, use correct vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, of course. Singing is a great hobby that helps people connect with each other. For example, many people sing after a busy day at work to relax and relieve stress. Additionally, singing can boost their mood and make them feel happier and more positive.

× Yes, I like singing as a hobby because it helps me relax after a busy day as sturdily For example, I often turn on some very strong to relax after a busy day an it is it not only help me boost my mood but also. Recharge my battery for long day.

✓ Yes, I like singing as a hobby because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I often turn on some very strong music to relax after a busy day and it not only helps me boost my mood but also recharges my battery for a long day.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and sentence fragments. 'as sturdily' is incorrect and unclear, 'an' should be 'and', and 'it is it not only help me' should be 'it not only helps me'. Also, 'Recharge' should be 'recharges' to agree with the subject. The sentence is corrected to properly connect ideas and fix verb agreement.

× Uh no, I have been formally learned how to sing because singing is my favorite hobby so I just enjoy doing it casually and however I try to improve my singing skills.

✓ Uh no, I have not formally learned how to sing because singing is my favorite hobby so I just enjoy doing it casually; however, I try to improve my singing skills.

The phrase 'have been formally learned' is incorrect. The correct form is 'have not formally learned' to express the negative present perfect tense. Also, 'and however' is redundant; 'however' alone is sufficient to contrast ideas.

× By singing along to my favorite songs regularly, this helps me get better. Leader by literary.

✓ Singing along to my favorite songs regularly helps me get better, especially with lyrics.

The phrase 'Leader by literary' is unclear and likely a mistranslation or typo. 'By singing along to' is correct, but 'this helps me get better' should be connected properly. The correction clarifies the meaning and fixes sentence structure.

× Well, I want to sing for everyone around me, especially my mother. For example, I often choose many songs about mother to practice whenever I have free time an because it is not only help me express my so N things to my mom, but oh all the song is really meaningful and.

✓ Well, I want to sing for everyone around me, especially my mother. For example, I often choose many songs about mothers to practice whenever I have free time because it not only helps me express my feelings to my mom, but also all the songs are really meaningful.

'Many songs about mother' should be 'many songs about mothers' to use the plural form. 'It is not only help me' should be 'it not only helps me' for subject-verb agreement. 'So N things' is unclear and replaced with 'feelings'. 'Oh all the song is' corrected to 'all the songs are' for plural agreement.

× For example, many people choose to sing after a busy day at work to realize and relieve their stress.

✓ For example, many people choose to sing after a busy day at work to relax and relieve their stress.

The word 'realize' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'relax'. This is a misuse of vocabulary rather than grammar, but correcting it improves clarity.

× Additionally, singing can boost their mood and make them feel more positive and have more hapiness.

✓ Additionally, singing can boost their mood and make them feel more positive and happier.

'Have more hapiness' is incorrect; the correct form is 'happier' to describe the comparative adjective. Also, 'hapiness' is misspelled; the correct spelling is 'happiness'. Using 'happier' fits better with 'feel' in this context.