Shopping— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and tighten structure: start with a clear topic sentence, give one specific reason with a linking word, then provide a brief example. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like "uh". Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "that same cloth" → "the same item").

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it makes me happy and allows me to try new styles. However, I worry about overspending, so I often bargain to get a better price; when a seller offers a fair deal on an item I like, I feel satisfied.

Sugerencia: Make tense and word choice consistent and use one linking word to explain process. Keep it concise: topic sentence + supporting detail about how you compare (methods) and result. Replace vague phrases like "the thing" with specific nouns.

Ejemplo: Yes, I always compare prices because I don't want to pay more than necessary. For example, I check several online and retail sites and then buy the item from the retailer offering the lowest price.

Sugerencia: Good structure and a clear example; improve by adding a linking phrase to show consequence and by tightening wording. Avoid repeating similar words (e.g., "online and in stores").

Ejemplo: Yes, I often struggle because there are so many styles and colours available, so I end up spending a long time comparing brands and reading reviews before buying a jacket.

Sugerencia: Clarify and organize your opinion: give a clear topic sentence stating your view, then explain two contrasting reasons using linking words (e.g., "however", "on the other hand"). Remove hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., "depend from" → "depend on"). Finish with a concise concluding clause.

Ejemplo: No, I don't think expensive products are always better. On one hand, premium brands can offer higher quality and prestige; on the other hand, affordable items can be good value for money, so it depends on the product and personal priorities.

× I like to bargain while shopping and trying new clothes.

✓ I like to bargain while shopping and trying on new clothes.

The verb phrase 'try new clothes' is acceptable, but when referring to testing clothes on your body, English commonly uses the phrasal verb 'try on'. Use 'trying on' (verb + -ing) to show the continuous action during shopping. Suggestion: use 'try on' for clothes when indicating wearing them to check fit.

× When someone uh, gives a reasonable price uh, for that same cloth, I feel that I have uh, got a good deal.

✓ When someone gives a reasonable price for that same item, I feel that I have got a good deal.

The original mixes present 'gives' with informal 'got'. 'Have got' (present perfect) is acceptable but 'cloth' is not the best noun for one product; 'item' or 'piece of clothing' is clearer. Keep present perfect 'have got' or use 'have gotten' (US). Suggestion: replace 'cloth' with 'item' and keep 'have got' for present perfect.

× I checked several online and retailer sites and then I compare the prices and I get the thing where it is cheapest from.

✓ I checked several online and retail sites and then I compared the prices and I bought the item from where it was cheapest.

Tense consistency error: the speaker starts with past 'checked' but switches to present 'compare' and 'get'. Maintain past tense throughout when describing a past action: 'checked', 'compared', 'bought'. Also 'retailer sites' should be 'retail sites' and 'get the thing where it is cheapest from' is ungrammatical; use 'bought the item from where it was cheapest.'

× I spend a long time comparing brands and reading the reviews, which makes the decision harder.

✓ I spend a long time comparing brands and reading reviews, which makes the decision harder.

Minor article use: 'the reviews' is acceptable but 'reading reviews' is more natural and general. No tense change needed; present simple is correct for habitual or typical actions. Suggestion: omit 'the' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, no, I don't think expensive products are bad better than cheaper ones.

✓ Uh, no, I don't think expensive products are better than cheaper ones.

The phrase 'bad better' is contradictory and ungrammatical. Remove 'bad' to correctly compare qualities: 'expensive products are better than cheaper ones.' Use simple comparative structure 'X are better than Y.'

× This would, uh, depend from person to person.

✓ This would depend on the person.

The verb 'depend' collocates with preposition 'on', not 'from'. Also 'person to person' is wordy; 'depend on the person' or 'depend from person to person' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'depend on' and simplify to 'on the person' or 'from person to person' (but 'on the person' is more natural here).

× Some might feel that uh, prestigious, umm brand would offer you reliability and uh, with will showcase your status, but uh, cost effective items are also.

✓ Some might feel that a prestigious brand would offer reliability and showcase your status, but cost-effective items are also good choices.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'prestigious brand' (use 'a'), unnecessary commas, incorrect 'with will showcase' (ungrammatical), and sentence ends abruptly 'are also.' Correct structure: 'a prestigious brand would offer reliability and showcase your status,' and finish the contrast 'but cost-effective items are also good choices.' Also use hyphen 'cost-effective' for compound adjective.