Watch— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., “instead of rather than”, “symbolise the success and flag”). Use correct verb forms and articles.

Ejemplo: No, I don't usually wear a watch these days because I use my phone to check the time. Also, I prefer bracelets for fashion purposes since they suit my style better than a watch.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and correct grammar. Give one clear supporting detail about who gave it and why, using linking words to connect ideas. Use past tense correctly and avoid awkward phrases like “improve my wearing skills”.

Ejemplo: Yes. My mother gave me a watch for my 17th birthday because she knew I liked fashion. She thought a watch would help me look more mature and complete my outfits.

Sugerencia: Provide a structured answer with specific reasons and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, because, moreover) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “status” instead of “SA status”). Offer two clear reasons: status and craftsmanship/hobby.

Ejemplo: Some people wear expensive watches because they are a status symbol and can show success. Moreover, others appreciate the craftsmanship and collect watches as a hobby.

Sugerencia: Give a concise opinion with two clear reasons, using correct grammar and linking phrases. Avoid unclear expressions (e.g., “create the heat for the wrist”) — instead say “can be uncomfortable.” Use subject-verb agreement and articles.

Ejemplo: I don't think wearing a watch is very important today because most people use their phones to check the time. Also, watches can be uncomfortable for some people, so they prefer not to wear one.

× Recently I don't wear a watch because I have the phone timer to see when I need.

✓ Recently I don't wear a watch because I have the phone timer to check the time when I need it.

The original sentence uses 'see when I need' which is awkward and missing an object; 'check the time' is the correct collocation for using a phone to view time. Also add 'it' to refer to time. Use present simple 'don't wear' is acceptable for recent habit.

× Moreover, I think bracelets can help me improve my style instead of rather than using a watch, I think wearing watch symbolise the success and flag.

✓ Moreover, I think bracelets can help me improve my style instead of using a watch; I think wearing a watch symbolizes success and status.

The phrase 'instead of rather than' is redundant; choose one ('instead of'). 'Wearing watch' needs the article 'a watch'. 'Symbolise' should be 'symbolizes' to match subject-verb agreement in American spelling (or 'symbolise' and 'symbolise' with British spelling but keep agreement). 'Flag' is incorrect word choice; 'status' fits context. Also separate into two clauses for clarity.

× Yes I have it was a gift for my 17th birthday for my mom.

✓ Yes, I have it; it was a gift from my mom for my 17th birthday.

The original mixes present and past without punctuation. Use 'it was' for past event and 'from my mom' is correct preposition. Add commas and semicolon to separate ideas.

× She decided to buy it because she know I really want to show my styles and improve my wearing skills to be a stylish.

✓ She decided to buy it because she knew I really wanted to show my style and improve how I dress to be more stylish.

Pronoun/verb agreement: 'she know' should be 'she knew' (past). Tense consistency: 'I really want' should match past intent 'I really wanted'. 'Show my styles' is unnatural; use 'show my style'. 'Improve my wearing skills' is awkward; 'improve how I dress' is clearer. 'To be a stylish' should be 'to be more stylish' or 'to become stylish'.

× I think some people wear expensive watches to uh, improve the wearing styles, uh, just simplify the success and SA status.

✓ I think some people wear expensive watches to improve their style and to signal success or social status.

'Improve the wearing styles' is awkward; 'improve their style' is natural. 'Simplify the success' is incorrect; 'signal' or 'show' fits. 'SA status' is unclear; likely 'social status'. Use 'their' to match plural subject 'people'.

× Moreover, maybe it is a hobby of them, uh, just to check the time.

✓ Moreover, maybe it is their hobby, or they simply like to check the time.

'A hobby of them' is incorrect; use 'their hobby' or 'a hobby of theirs'. Also rephrase for naturalness and subject clarity.

× I think wearing watch is no more important nowadays because everyone have the phone there old phone to check the time.

✓ I think wearing a watch is not very important nowadays because everyone has a phone to check the time.

Missing article: 'wearing a watch'. 'No more important' is unnatural; 'not very important' or 'no longer important' works. Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone have' should be 'everyone has'. Remove 'there old phone' which is incorrect and unnecessary.

× And I think wearing watch can uh create the heat for the wrist so it's not convenient for the people who will watch.

✓ And I think wearing a watch can create heat on the wrist, so it's not comfortable for people who wear one.

Missing article 'a watch'. Use 'create heat on the wrist' or 'make the wrist hot' rather than 'create the heat for the wrist'. 'People who will watch' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'people who wear one'. Use 'comfortable' rather than 'convenient' for physical sensation.