Watch— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g. "look at my phone" → "check my phone"), and use one or two specific reasons with linking words. Limit to 2–4 sentences. Practice smoother transitions and remove filler words like "umm."

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually wear a watch because it is more convenient than checking my phone. For example, when I am walking or carrying bags I can simply glance at my wrist, which is quicker than taking out my phone. This saves time and feels more polite in social situations.

Sugerencia: Make the response clearer and better organized: give a direct topic sentence, then provide one or two specific supporting details (who gave it, why, and what it meant). Correct tense and vocabulary ("got" → "received", "primary school" and "middle school"). Avoid long, confused clauses.

Ejemplo: Yes, I received a watch as a graduation present when I finished primary school. My parents gave it to me and told me to value my time because I was about to start middle school, so it reminded me to study hard and aim for good grades.

Sugerencia: Good concise answer with relevant examples. Improve vocabulary accuracy and clarity: correct small errors (e.g. "sign no success" → "signal their success"). Add a linking phrase to show reason and maybe a short contrast if desired. Keep it natural and avoid overgeneralization.

Ejemplo: Many people wear expensive watches to signal status and wealth. For example, a luxury watch can show others that someone is successful; it is also a fashion statement and sometimes an investment because certain brands increase in value over time.

Sugerencia: Be direct and structured: state your opinion in one clear sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons with linking words. Correct phrasing ("check the time", "when phones are not allowed"). Avoid repeating ideas and filler words; finish with a concise concluding remark.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think wearing a watch is important because it lets you check the time quickly, especially in places where phones are not allowed, such as exams or formal events. In addition, a watch can help you manage your schedule more effectively, so it is both practical and useful.

× Yes, I would like to wear a watch in my daily life because I think that it is more convenient for us to watch the time on it than just the using the cell phone recently.

✓ Yes, I would like to wear a watch in my daily life because I think that it is more convenient for us to check the time on it than just using the cell phone recently.

The phrase 'the using the cell phone' is incorrect; 'using' should follow directly after the comparative structure without 'the'. Use 'check the time' instead of 'watch the time' for natural collocation. Suggestion: remove the extra article and place the -ing form immediately after the verb (e.g., 'than just using the cell phone').

× Because if we would like to know when is it on the telephone, we need to find the telephone and open it.

✓ Because if we would like to know the time on the phone, we need to find the phone and unlock it.

The clause 'when is it on the telephone' uses incorrect word order for an indirect question and awkward noun choice. Use 'the time on the phone' and neutral verb 'unlock' or 'turn it on'. For indirect questions keep subject before verb: 'we would like to know the time'.

× But actually to say that the watch is more. Convenient telephone because we can just, umm, find it over our hands.

✓ But actually, watches are more convenient than phones because we can just look at them on our wrists.

Sentence has fragment 'to say that the watch is more.' and wrong comparison 'convenient telephone'. Restructure to a complete sentence and use correct comparative phrase 'more convenient than phones' and natural collocation 'look at them on our wrists'.

× Yes, I have got a watch as a present when I when I graduated from the primary school and I would like after that I need to go into the middle school for further study and at that time a motherboard for me just want to told me and I need to treasure the time and put all of myself just studying in the middle school.

✓ Yes, I got a watch as a present when I graduated from primary school, and after that I went to middle school for further study. At that time my mother told me to treasure time and devote myself to studying in middle school.

Use simple past 'got' and 'graduated' for completed past events rather than 'have got' in this context. Remove repetition and correct 'mother' for 'mother' and 'put all of myself' to 'devote myself'. Also split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events and choose natural verbs like 'devote'.

× And having a high score in the future.

✓ And to achieve high scores in the future.

Fragment lacks subject and proper verb form. Use infinitive 'to achieve' to connect with previous sentence, and 'scores' plural is more natural. Suggestion: link with prior sentence or make complete clause beginning with 'I hoped' or 'I wanted'.

× Many people wear expensive watches as a symbol of status and wealth.

✓ Many people wear expensive watches as symbols of status and wealth.

'Symbol' should be plural to match 'many people' and the plural subject implying multiple instances. Use plural 'symbols' for natural agreement.

× For example, a luxury watch can sign no success to others and sometimes acts as a fashion statement or even an investment.

✓ For example, a luxury watch can signal success to others and sometimes act as a fashion statement or even an investment.

'Sign no success' is incorrect collocation; use verb 'signal' and noun 'success'. Also maintain verb agreement: 'can signal' with base verb 'act'. Suggestion: use 'signal success' and ensure verbs after 'can' are base form.

× I think it is more important to wear a watch because actually to think to say that we can bring the watch everywhere.

✓ I think it is important to wear a watch because we can bring a watch everywhere.

Remove redundant phrasing 'actually to think to say that' which is ungrammatical. Use simple present 'I think' and 'we can bring a watch everywhere'. Keep tense consistent and concise.

× No matter the special occasions which cannot use mobile phones or the school exams, we can bring a watch in it and it can help us to watch the time more conveniently than using.

✓ For example, on special occasions when you cannot use mobile phones, such as during school exams, you can wear a watch and it helps you check the time more conveniently than a phone.

Original mixes structures and uses incorrect relative clause 'which cannot use mobile phones' and wrong preposition 'bring a watch in it'. Use 'when' to introduce condition, 'wear a watch' or 'you can wear a watch' and 'check the time' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: reorganize sentence with clear clauses and correct verbs.

× so I think that it is important to wear a watch umm and not not only be good for ourselves, but also to keep a good.

✓ So I think that it is important to wear a watch; it is not only good for ourselves, but also helps us keep good timekeeping habits.

Sentence has repetition 'not not', fragment 'to keep a good' and unclear meaning. Replace with clear comparative structure 'not only... but also' followed by parallel structures. Suggestion: finish the thought with a noun phrase like 'good timekeeping habits' or 'punctuality'.