Advertisement— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and unnecessary repetition.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, one toothpaste advertisement impressed me. I had cavities and a broken tooth at the time, so the ad promising whiter, healthier teeth made me feel both embarrassed and hopeful. As a result, I asked my parents to buy that brand and paid more attention to brushing.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer first, then add one or two specific examples. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance' and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement).

Ejemplo: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, trains and buses often carry posters and full-carriage wraps for mobile phones, cosmetics and fast-food chains, which reach many commuters every day.

Sugerencia: Keep answers fluent and reduce hesitations. Give a clear opinion followed by a reason and a brief exception if needed. Avoid filler sounds and fragmented phrases.

Ejemplo: I don't really like advertisements because they interrupt films and break my concentration. However, I sometimes watch ads voluntarily if they are creative or related to a product I'm interested in.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and clearly state the category you prefer, then give specific reasons and concise details. Remove filler words and organize ideas with linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Ejemplo: I prefer advertisements for health and fitness supplements because I'm researching nutrition and muscle building right now. I pay attention to how claims are presented and whether the ads include evidence or hide side effects.

Sugerencia: Be concise and use clear examples. State frequency, then describe the forms of ads you see and one effect they have on you. Avoid repeated filler words and vague phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, very often. Apps and websites frequently show pop-up ads or autoplay video ads on my phone and computer, which wastes data and distracts me from what I'm doing, so I usually install an ad blocker or close them quickly.

× During my childhood, I saw an advertisement regarding toothpaste which has miracle value to make the teeth brighter and impressive and during that Phase I was suffering from broken tooth.

✓ During my childhood, I saw an advertisement about a toothpaste that claimed to have miraculous power to make teeth brighter and more attractive, and at that time I was suffering from a broken tooth.

The sentence used awkward phrasing and incorrect forms ('has miracle value', 'impressive', 'during that Phase'). Use of 'that claimed' and 'miraculous power' fits past reference; 'teeth' is plural and 'a broken tooth' is singular. Rephrase for clarity and correct adjective use.

× Moreover I had cavities.

✓ Moreover, I had cavities.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense but needs a comma after 'Moreover' for punctuation and flow. No tense change required.

× So I feel ashamed that time and I was inspired by this specific advertisement.

✓ So I felt ashamed at that time, and I was inspired by that specific advertisement.

Mixed present 'feel' with past context; change to past 'felt'. Use 'at that time' for idiomatic expression and 'that specific advertisement' for reference clarity.

× Definitely, this is also has become one of the way to show the advertisement to a wider audience.

✓ Definitely, this has also become one of the ways to show advertisements to a wider audience.

Incorrect article and number: 'one of the way' should be 'one of the ways'. 'This is also has' is ungrammatical; use 'this has also become'. 'Advertisement' should be plural when speaking generally.

× Moreover, now every other buses and train having lots of advertisement regarding several commodities many things that I saw while traveling through these two transport.

✓ Moreover, now almost every bus and train has lots of advertisements for various products, which I see when I travel by those two modes of transport.

Problems: 'every other buses and train' mixes singular/plural—use 'every bus and train' or 'almost every bus and train'. Verb agreement: 'having' should be 'has'. 'Advertisement' plural, 'commodities many things' awkward—use 'various products'. Clarify 'these two transport' to 'those two modes of transport'.

× I'm really not into watching lots of commercials.

✓ I'm really not into watching lots of commercials.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and needs no change.

× Moreover, I umm, feel irritated when I see an any advertisement while I'm watching particular story or a movie because it somehow break my connection with that scene.

✓ Moreover, I feel irritated when I see any advertisement while I'm watching a particular story or a movie, because it somehow breaks my connection with the scene.

Remove filler 'umm'. 'an any advertisement' is incorrect—use 'any advertisement'. 'particular story' needs 'a'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it somehow break' should be 'it somehow breaks'. Add commas for clarity.

× And although I do explore some uh, advertisement at my own, but I really don't want.

✓ Although I do look at some advertisements on my own, I really don't want to watch many ads.

Avoid starting with 'And' and remove filler 'uh'. 'Explore' is unnatural; 'look at' or 'watch' fits. 'At my own' should be 'on my own'. The original used both 'Although' and 'but'—choose one conjunction. Clarify meaning with 'watch many ads'.

× I'm really, after watching uh supplements, especially focused on UH health and building muscles because these days I'm doing lots of research regarding it and moreover how they are being presented to the public and really want to figure out where they are pitching the public and what they are hiding I'm doing study on.

✓ I'm really interested in advertisements for supplements, especially those focused on health and muscle building, because these days I'm doing a lot of research on them and on how they are presented to the public; I want to figure out who they are targeting and what they might be hiding.

Many issues: remove filler 'uh', correct phrasing 'after watching supplements' to 'interested in advertisements for supplements'. 'UH' typo removed. Use 'a lot of research' not 'lots of research regarding it'. 'Where they are pitching the public' is unidiomatic—use 'who they are targeting'. Split into clearer clauses and use semicolon for related ideas.

× Very frequently actually, uh, I have whatever I open on my phone, uh, suddenly an advertisement pop up, Uh, if I, even if I'm opening my website or my Facebook account, I am consuming unnecessarily information and data and ended up by, uh, struggling to remove that particular content for my mind.

✓ Very frequently, whenever I open something on my phone, an advertisement suddenly pops up. Even when I open a website or my Facebook account, I consume unnecessary information and data and end up struggling to remove that content from my mind.

Fix sequence and tense: use 'whenever' not 'whatever'. Subject-verb agreement: 'an advertisement pop up' -> 'an advertisement suddenly pops up'. 'I am consuming unnecessarily information' -> 'I consume unnecessary information'. 'Ended up by, struggling' -> 'end up struggling'. 'Remove that particular content for my mind' -> 'remove that content from my mind' for idiomatic phrasing.