Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (umm, honestly), correct grammar (e.g. 'drawing is my nature' → 'drawing is in my nature'), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words for coherence (e.g. 'however', 'but').

Ejemplo: No, I don’t enjoy drawing much because it’s not something I’m good at. However, I do like scribbling when I study, for example I often doodle in the margins of my notebooks to help me concentrate.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer then support with specific reasons and examples. Reduce repetition and improve grammar ('galleries', 'in my country'). Use linking words to contrast (e.g. 'but', 'however') and explain why you prefer galleries abroad.

Ejemplo: It depends. When I travel abroad I love visiting galleries because they let me experience other cultures and see different styles of painting. But in my country I rarely go to galleries because I find the exhibitions are less interesting and rarely updated.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid repeating prior phrases. Clarify what you mean by 'translations' and give a specific example of what you would like to learn. Use linking words to connect ideas ('for example', 'if').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to learn more about art, especially when I travel abroad because I enjoy learning about different artistic traditions. For example, if galleries provide information in a language I understand or translations of labels, I would spend more time studying the artworks and their cultural meanings.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, coherent narrative: state that you learned drawing as a child, give one or two concrete details about lessons or activities, then explain succinctly why you lost interest. Correct tense and word choice (e.g. 'my mom enrolled me in an art academy', 'my interest faded').

Ejemplo: Yes. My mother enrolled me in an art academy when I was in elementary school, and I really enjoyed drawing and making small paintings. However, as I grew older I had less time and my interest faded because I focused more on academics.

× Personally, honestly I'm not umm drawing is that my nature?

✓ Personally, honestly, drawing is not really my nature.

The original sentence misuses 'not umm drawing is that my nature' and lacks correct preposition/word order. This is a sentence-structure and preposition/word-choice issue: 'drawing is not really my nature' is idiomatic. Remove filler words and place 'not' before the adjective phrase for clarity. Suggestion: Remove fillers and use clear subject + verb + complement order.

× So I'm not good at drawing so I don't prefer to drawing but I like to scribbling so when I study there is always struggling anywhere of the books.

✓ So I'm not good at drawing, so I don't prefer drawing, but I like scribbling, and when I study I always struggle with parts of the books.

Multiple errors: incorrect use of infinitive after 'prefer' (should be noun/gerund: 'prefer drawing'), incorrect gerund after 'like' (use 'liking scribbling' or 'I like scribbling'), incorrect passive/phrase 'there is always struggling anywhere of the books' should be active 'I always struggle with parts of the books.' These are gerund/infinitive and preposition errors. Suggest using consistent gerunds for activities and correct preposition 'with' for struggling.

× Well, it depends on situations.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

Use singular 'the situation' or 'situations' with context. 'Depends on situations' is unnatural; typical collocation is 'depends on the situation' or 'depends on the circumstances.' Suggest using singular definite form for general statements.

× When I go to travel, I like, I love to go to gallery and experience of other culture or other paintings.

✓ When I travel, I love to go to galleries and experience other cultures and paintings.

Use 'travel' without 'go to' ('go to travel' is incorrect). Use plural 'galleries' and 'cultures' when speaking generally. Remove 'to' before 'gallery' and adjust noun forms. Also 'experience of other culture' should be 'experience other cultures.' Suggest: 'When I travel, I love visiting galleries and experiencing other cultures and paintings.'

× However, in our countries I don't prefer to go gallery.

✓ However, in my country I don't prefer to go to galleries.

'Our countries' is unclear; likely 'my country' is intended. Use 'go to galleries' (preposition 'to' plus plural 'galleries') and avoid 'prefer to go' with singular noun. Suggest: 'In my country, I don't prefer going to galleries.'

× It is not my type.

✓ It's not my type of activity.

'Not my type' is colloquial but incomplete; adding 'of activity' clarifies the noun phrase. Alternatively 'It's not my type' is acceptable but sounds vague. Suggest specifying what 'type' refers to.

× As I mentioned earlier, umm it depends on country or situations.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, it depends on the country or the situation.

Missing articles before 'country' and 'situations.' Use 'the country' or 'a country' and 'the situation' for clarity. Suggest: 'it depends on the country or the situation.'

× Uh, when I go to other country, absolutely I want to learn more, but in our country I don't want umm.

✓ When I go to another country, I definitely want to learn more, but in my country I don't.

Use 'another country' or 'a foreign country' instead of 'other country.' 'Absolutely' is better as 'definitely.' 'I don't' needs an object omitted for 'want to learn more'—ellipsis is acceptable but ensure clarity: 'I don't' implies 'want to.' Also change 'our country' to 'my country' for consistency.

× If there are translations, I would love to learn about our culture.

✓ If there are translations, I would love to learn about my culture.

'Our culture' vs 'my culture' consistency—speaker earlier contrasts own country with others, so 'my culture' is clearer. No grammatical preposition error otherwise. Suggest consistent pronoun use.

× Of course, when I was in elementary school, my mom ignored me in an art Academy.

✓ Of course, when I was in elementary school, my mom enrolled me in an art academy.

'Ignored me in an art Academy' is incorrect word choice. Likely intended 'enrolled' or 'sent me' to an art academy. Also 'art academy' should not be capitalized. Use past tense 'enrolled' which fits context.

× I really enjoy drawing and making artwork then, but I when I grow.

✓ I really enjoyed drawing and making artwork then, but when I grew up,

Tense inconsistency: speaker refers to past time 'then' so use past tense 'enjoyed.' 'When I grow' should be past 'when I grew up.' Suggest keeping past tense for childhood events.

× As I grow older, my creativity faded and I roast my interest of drawing or painting.

✓ As I grew older, my creativity faded and I lost my interest in drawing and painting.

'As I grow older' should be past 'grew' to match 'faded.' 'Roast' is wrong word; intended 'lost.' Use 'lost my interest in' and 'drawing and painting' (use 'and' not 'or'). Suggest replacing incorrect verbs and preposition: 'lost interest in' is the correct collocation.