Art— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'I am be', 'imaginable').

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy drawing, although I'm not very skilled at it. For example, I have creative ideas and often imagine scenes, but I lack technical skills like shading and perspective, so my drawings don't look as realistic as I'd like.

Sugerencia: Clarify meaning and use smoother linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., 'feature leisure', 'Lesser known artists think their work'). Give one clear reason for dislike and one clear positive point about lesser-known artists with specific example.

Ejemplo: I usually don't enjoy galleries that mainly show famous painters such as Van Gogh because the works feel familiar to me. However, I like exhibitions of lesser-known artists since their pieces are often surprising and I can discover new styles or ideas.

Sugerencia: Organise into a clear short answer and one or two specific plans. Avoid fragments and incorrect word order. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' and give concrete examples of what you would learn (techniques, classes).

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to learn more about art, especially basic painting techniques. Therefore, I plan to take weekly offline classes or online courses focusing on drawing fundamentals, color mixing and brushwork so I can improve my skills.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear past-tense response with specific details and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence ('Yes, I took classes...'), then add 1–2 concrete details (age, frequency, who encouraged you, how you feel now). Avoid unclear phrases like 'learned joy' or 'should have been booked'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I took drawing classes after school when I was a child because my mother enrolled me and hoped I would become an artist. I practiced regularly for a few years, but I later realised I wasn't very skilled, so drawing became a hobby rather than a career goal.

× Yes, I like drawing, but actually to say that I'm not good at it because I think that I am be creative.

✓ Yes, I like drawing, but actually I have to say that I'm not good at it because I don't consider myself creative.

Original uses incorrect verb form 'am be' and awkward phrasing. Use 'have to say' or 'actually I have to say' and 'don't consider myself creative' to correctly express lack of creativity and proper pronoun/reflexive reference. Suggestion: Use 'consider myself' or 'think I am' without extra auxiliary verbs.

× I am creative and imaginable person, but actually to say that my basic skills about drawing picture is so weak to draw a perfect.

✓ I am a creative and imaginative person, but my basic drawing skills are too weak to draw perfectly.

Problems: missing article 'a' before 'creative', wrong adjective 'imaginable' should be 'imaginative', ungrammatical phrase 'basic skills about drawing picture' (use 'basic drawing skills'), subject-verb agreement 'skills is' should be 'skills are', and incorrect use of 'to draw a perfect'—use adverb 'perfectly' or 'a perfect painting'. Suggestion: Use 'a creative and imaginative person' and 'my basic drawing skills are too weak to draw perfectly.'

× Paintings than other people.

✓ I can't paint as well as other people.

Original fragment lacks subject and verb and incorrect comparative structure. Use full comparative sentence 'can't paint as well as other people' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: Ensure complete sentence with subject and verb and use 'as...as' for comparisons.

× I generally don't enjoy visiting art galleries that mainly display works by very famous artists because I already know a lot about painters like Van Gogh.

✓ I generally don't enjoy visiting art galleries that mainly display works by very famous artists because I already know a lot about painters such as Van Gogh.

'Like Van Gogh' is acceptable colloquially but 'such as' is more appropriate in formal spoken/written English to give an example. This is a minor word choice/quantifier issue; keep tense and meaning. Suggestion: Use 'such as' for examples in more formal contexts.

× However, I do like going to exhibitions that feature leisure.

✓ However, I do like going to exhibitions that feature lesser-known artists.

Original 'feature leisure' is nonsensical here. The student likely meant 'lesser-known artists' which fits context. Ensure the object of 'feature' is correct. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases like 'lesser-known artists'.

× Lesser known artists think their work can be more surprising and I can discover something new.

✓ Lesser-known artists' work can be more surprising and I can discover something new.

Original incorrectly makes artists the subject 'think their work...' which changes meaning; hyphenation 'lesser-known' and possessive form 'artists'' are needed. Also verb 'think' is unnecessary. Keep simple: 'their work can be more surprising.' Suggestion: Use 'lesser-known artists' work can be more surprising.'

× Yes, I'd like to learn more about it, just like the thing I have been talked about before.

✓ Yes, I'd like to learn more about it, like I said before.

Original 'the thing I have been talked about before' is ungrammatical. Use 'like I said before' or 'as I mentioned before'. Suggestion: Use 'as I mentioned before' or 'like I said before' for clarity.

× And I think that I am before at the basic skills about painting, so I am more likely to learn a offline class or some online courses about how to exercise my painting skills.

✓ And I think that I am still at a basic level in painting, so I am likely to take an offline class or some online courses to practice my painting skills.

Multiple preposition and article errors: 'before' misused, 'at the basic skills about painting' should be 'at a basic level in painting', 'learn a offline class' -> 'take an offline class', 'exercise my painting skills' -> 'practice my painting skills'. Suggestion: Use 'at a basic level in painting' and 'take an offline class' or 'enroll in online courses'.

× So I think that it is very important for me to develop my. Anything ability in the future?

✓ So I think that it is very important for me to develop my artistic abilities in the future.

Original has sentence fragment 'develop my. Anything ability' and incorrect word choice. Use 'artistic abilities' to clearly refer to skills related to art. Suggestion: Keep nouns coherent and avoid fragments.

× Yes, I have learned joy when I was a kids and I learned in the after class we should have been booked from my mother and added that she would like me to be a artist in the future.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed drawing when I was a kid, and after class my mother enrolled me because she wanted me to become an artist in the future.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms: 'have learned joy' is wrong—use 'enjoyed drawing', 'when I was a kids' -> 'when I was a kid', 'we should have been booked from my mother' -> 'my mother enrolled me', 'added that she would like me to be a artist' -> 'she wanted me to become an artist'. Suggestion: Use simple past for past events and correct collocations like 'enroll someone' and 'become an artist'.

× But actually to say that I finally found I'm not good at it.

✓ But eventually I found that I'm not good at it.

Original 'to say that I finally found' is awkward. Use 'eventually I found that' or 'I eventually discovered that'. Maintain past tense 'found' with present result 'I'm not good at it' is acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'eventually I found' or 'I eventually discovered'.

× So I just become a little habit about myself recently.

✓ So recently I just developed a small habit related to drawing.

Original 'become a little habit about myself' is ungrammatical. Use 'developed a small habit related to drawing' to convey meaning. Ensure verb tense matches 'recently'. Suggestion: Use 'recently I developed a habit' or 'I've recently developed a habit'.