Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and vague words. Work on pronunciation and grammar for clarity (e.g., use 'prefer' correctly, say 'I dream of a career in aviation' instead of fragmented phrases).

Ejemplo: I can remember my dreams. My biggest dream is to work in aviation; for example, I would like to be a pilot or an air traffic controller because I love flying and managing aircraft. I also enjoy performing and would like to try being a K-pop dancer one day.

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly and organize your reply: say yes or no, then explain briefly with clear examples. Avoid long unclear lists and correct word choices (e.g., 'I don't usually share my dreams' or 'I tell close friends'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I don't usually share my dreams with everyone; I only tell close friends and family because I want their support. For example, I have told my parents that I want to study aviation, and I recently mentioned my interest in dancing to my dance teacher.

Sugerencia: Make a concise opinion statement, then support it with clear reasons and a specific example. Use correct grammar for general statements ('humans need dreams at all ages') and linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'therefore'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think dreams have special meanings because they give people goals and motivation. For example, dreaming of becoming a pilot can encourage a teenager to study hard and join aviation clubs, which helps them reach that goal.

Sugerencia: Respond directly and confidently with one clear reason and one concrete plan or step. Avoid filler phrases and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' and try to finish within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I definitely want my dreams to come true because I love aviation and dancing. To achieve them, I plan to study aerospace engineering and take dance classes so I can prepare for both careers.

× Yes, I can prefer my dream.

✓ Yes, I can describe my dream.

The student used 'prefer' incorrectly; after 'can' a base verb should follow. 'Prefer' means to like more and doesn't fit context. Use 'describe' or 'talk about'. Also avoid using 'can' with 'prefer' in this context. Suggestion: use 'I can describe my dream' or 'I can tell you about my dream.'

× Yeah, I can say out my really big dream is aviation.

✓ Yeah, I can say that my really big dream is aviation.

The phrase 'say out' is nonstandard. Use 'say that' to introduce a clause. Also include 'that' for clarity. Ensure verb 'say' is followed by a clause. Suggestion: 'I can say that my biggest dream is aviation.'

× Talk about aviation like a pilot, air traffic control and particularly fasten and airport.

✓ By aviation I mean roles like pilot, air traffic controller, and particularly fasten? No — I mean working at an airport.

The original sentence has several problems: 'Talk about' is awkward — should be 'By aviation I mean'. 'Air traffic control' should be 'air traffic controller' for a person. 'Fasten' is incorrect word choice; student likely meant 'ground staff' or 'flying' or 'flight attendant' or 'control tower staff'. 'Airport' needs context. Suggestion: clarify intended roles, e.g. 'I mean roles like pilot, air traffic controller, and working at an airport.'

× But I have one more job that I want to be a single that sounds like Campbell Dancer.

✓ But I have one more job I want to do: I want to be a singer and a dancer.

The student used 'single' instead of 'singer' and 'that sounds like Campbell Dancer' is unclear. 'Want to be a single' is incorrect noun/adjective use. Use 'want to be a singer and a dancer.' Also remove 'that sounds like Campbell Dancer' or clarify the reference. Suggestion: 'I also want to be a singer and a dancer.'

× So if I want to be when I grow, I'm gonna choose.

✓ So when I grow up, I will choose that.

Incorrect word order and informal contraction 'gonna'. 'If I want to be when I grow' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I grow up' for future intention and 'I will choose that' for a decision. Suggestion: 'When I grow up, I will choose that.'

× No, I don't have to dream that one.

✓ No, I don't have that dream.

'Don't have to dream that one' incorrectly uses 'have to' and 'dream'. The intended meaning is possession: 'I don't have that dream.' Suggestion: Say 'I don't have that dream' or 'I don't dream about that.'

× You just I'm just telling you that I have a aviation like colorful tender can say cabby crow or air traffic control or engineer, civil engineer, you know right.

✓ I'm just telling you that I have an interest in aviation, like being a cabin crew member, an air traffic controller, or a civil engineer.

This run-on sentence has many word choice and article errors. Use 'an interest in aviation' and 'an' before vowel-sound nouns ('an aviation' is incorrect; use 'in aviation'). Replace 'colorful tender' and 'cabby crow' with 'cabin crew' or 'cabin attendant'. Remove filler 'you know right'. Suggestion: Break into simple clauses and choose correct job titles.

× And I have a really good a single too and a dancer like a paper dancer.

✓ And I also really want to be a singer and a dancer, like a pop dancer.

'A single' should be 'a singer'. 'Paper dancer' is incorrect; likely 'pop dancer' or 'performer'. Remove extra articles 'a really good a'. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases: 'I also want to be a singer and a dancer.'

× Yeah, dream have a special meaning because our human need a a dream all all all of age like adult younger or teenager or young teenager like me a 10 years old.

✓ Yes, dreams have a special meaning because humans need dreams at all ages, whether adults, younger children, or teenagers like me; I am 10 years old.

Multiple agreement and article errors: 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match general meaning; 'have' is correct with plural. 'Our human' should be 'humans' or 'we humans'. Remove repeated words. 'a 10 years old' should be 'I am 10 years old' or 'a 10-year-old'. Suggestion: Use plural for general statements and correct age expression.

× And it really special meaning to like to have a goal to when we grow up it really.

✓ And it really has a special meaning because it gives us a goal for when we grow up.

Missing verb 'has' and awkward word order. Use 'has a special meaning' and 'gives us a goal for when we grow up.' Suggestion: Ensure sentences include a main verb and clear subject-object structure.

× Yes, definitely I want to I want to my my dream come true because my dream all is aviation and a K pop dancer.

✓ Yes, definitely I want my dreams to come true because my dreams are aviation-related and becoming a K-pop dancer.

Incorrect verb pattern 'want to my my dream come true' — use 'want my dreams to come true' (want + object + to-infinitive). 'My dream all' is unclear; use plural 'dreams' or 'both'. Suggestion: Use 'I want my dreams to come true' or 'I want to make my dreams come true.'

× So it I won't really want to become true.

✓ So I really want them to come true.

Sentence is ungrammatical: 'I won't really want to become true' mixes negatives and wrong verb forms. Use 'I really want them to come true' referring to dreams. Suggestion: Keep pronoun reference clear and use 'come true' for dreams.

× And yeah, this is really good question that I can answer, but I don't know that wrong.

✓ And yeah, that's a really good question I can answer, but I'm not sure if my answer is correct.

Awkward phrasing and tense: 'that I can answer' should be 'I can answer' or 'I could answer', and 'I don't know that wrong' is ungrammatical—use 'I'm not sure if I'm right' or 'if my answer is correct.' Suggestion: Use 'I'm not sure if I'm right' for uncertainty.

× when I grow up it really.

✓ when I grow up.

Fragmentary; remove extraneous 'it really'. The phrase 'when I grow up' is the correct prepositional/time expression. Suggestion: Keep final clause concise.