Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases (“like”, “you know”), correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “do good for the society” → “help society”), and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Add one specific detail about what aspect of being a software engineer appeals to you to make the answer more concrete.

Ejemplo: Yes, I remember my dreams quite clearly. As a child I wanted to be a doctor to help people, but now I hope to become a software engineer because I enjoy building apps that solve real problems. For example, I want to develop educational software to help students learn more effectively.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and separate the two ideas (sharing your own dreams and interest in others’ dreams). Remove fillers (“uh”, “like”), fix grammar (e.g., “others dreams” → “others’ dreams”), and give a concise specific reason or brief example to support each point.

Ejemplo: I usually don't share my personal dreams until I've made progress on them because I prefer to prove myself first. However, I am interested in other people's dreams; for instance, when a friend tells me about their career goals I listen carefully and offer help because I want to be supportive and trustworthy.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct statement and give a specific reason or short example. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing (“work ahead, work hard in your tragic events”). Use linking words (because, for example) and be concise—one topic sentence plus one supporting detail is enough.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe dreams are meaningful because they provide motivation and direction. For example, remembering my goal to become a software engineer helped me stay focused during a difficult semester and kept me studying consistently.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, concise answer and avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Use a topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail about what you are doing to achieve your dreams (plans, steps). This shows commitment and gives concrete content.

Ejemplo: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. To achieve this, I am studying computer science and building small projects so I can gain the skills and experience needed to work in the tech industry.

× Yeah, I remember my dreams very well.

✓ Yes, I remember my dreams very well.

Use 'Yes' instead of informal 'Yeah' in formal speaking; this is style rather than strict grammar but keeps present simple tense consistent.

× Like in childhood I wanted to be a doctor and do a good for the society.

✓ When I was a child, I wanted to be a doctor and do good for society.

Incorrect time expression and article usage. 'In childhood' is unnatural; use 'when I was a child'. 'Do a good for the society' has an unnecessary article 'a' and 'the society' should be 'society' for general meaning.

× But now things are changed and I want to become a software engineer and do a lot of good work in the technology department and you know.

✓ But now things have changed and I want to become a software engineer and do a lot of good work in the technology sector.

Use present perfect 'have changed' to describe a change from past to present. 'Technology department' is unnatural here; 'technology sector' or 'field' is better. Remove filler 'and you know' for clarity.

× I don't share my dreams with others because I want to make my dream come true before I can tell anybody.

✓ I don't share my dreams with others because I want to make my dreams come true before I tell anybody.

Modal and tense structure awkward: remove 'can' after 'before' and match plural 'dreams' with earlier reference. 'Before I tell anybody' is correct simple present for future-in-the-past intention.

× And yeah, I am interested in others dreams because when a person tell their dreams to somebody, uh like I feel very good because they feel that I am a trustworthy person.

✓ And yes, I am interested in others' dreams because when a person tells their dreams to somebody, I feel very good because they feel that I am a trustworthy person.

Punctuation and possessive: use others' for possessive. Subject-verb agreement: 'a person tell' should be 'a person tells'. Remove filler 'uh like'.

× Yeah, I think dreams have special meanings because they make you work hard in life to chase your goals and to motivate you.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meanings because they can motivate you and make you work hard in life to chase your goals.

Reorder for natural phrasing and clarity. Use modal 'can' to indicate possibility. Maintain present simple tense.

× When the times are tough, you can remember your thoughts, your dreams and you can work ahead, work hard in your tragic events also.

✓ When times are tough, you can remember your thoughts and dreams and keep working hard even during difficult times.

'The times' is unnecessary; use 'times'. 'Work ahead' is unnatural here; use 'keep working hard'. 'Tragic events' is too strong; 'difficult times' is more natural. Simplify and avoid redundancy.

× Yeah, I want to make my dreams come true because I don't want to make my dreams a dream only like I want to make my dreams come true and make a memories of out of it so that when I get old and in my deathbed I can remember that I have accomplished my dreams in this.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because I don't want them to remain just dreams; I want to create memories from them so that when I am old and on my deathbed I can remember that I accomplished my dreams.

Multiple issues: use 'them' to refer to dreams, not repeat phrase awkwardly. 'Make my dreams a dream only' is incorrect; use 'remain just dreams'. 'Make a memories of out of it' corrected to 'create memories from them'. Use 'when I am old and on my deathbed' and present perfect 'I accomplished' fits the reflection on completed life achievements.