Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and vocabulary, and give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., “many, many monies”).

Ejemplo: Yes. I have always dreamed of becoming an entrepreneur. When I was young I wanted to start my own tech company, and I have kept that goal by studying business and experimenting with small online projects.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer (yes/no), then explain with clear, grammatical sentences. Use linking words (however, but, because) and be specific about who you admire and why. Correct word choices (vulnerable heart → strong attachment; idols → role models).

Ejemplo: No, I don't usually share my biggest dream because I feel very protective of it. However, I do tell close friends that I want to be a professional violinist because I admire my teacher, who performs with a local orchestra and inspired me to practice regularly.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking phrases (for example, because, so, therefore). Use precise vocabulary (inspire, motivate, difficult times) and correct grammar. Give a concrete example of how a dream motivated you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think dreams can be meaningful because they motivate us. For example, my dream of starting a business kept me studying marketing during a difficult year, and that motivation helped me complete an online course and build a prototype.

Sugerencia: Be concise and realistic. Start with a clear yes/no, explain reasons with correct expressions (make dreams come true, financial situation), and avoid exaggerated or vague claims (very, very powerful). Show concrete steps you'll take to achieve the dream.

Ejemplo: Yes, I definitely want to achieve my dreams. I believe realizing a dream can improve your quality of life; for instance, becoming an entrepreneur could give me financial stability. To work toward this I plan to study business, gain work experience, and save money to start a small company.

× Yes, I have had many dreams and the most ambitious dreams is being an entrepreneur in the future and earn many, many monies.

✓ Yes, I have had many dreams and my most ambitious dream is to be an entrepreneur in the future and earn a lot of money.

Multiple errors: 'most ambitious dreams is' has subject-verb disagreement and plural/singular mismatch (Grammar IDs 27 and 1). Use possessive 'my' to specify which dream. Use infinitive 'to be' to express intent (Grammar ID 6). 'Monies' is incorrect in this context; use 'a lot of money' (word choice/quantifier, Grammar ID 14). Also change verb form 'earn' to fit the infinitive construction. Suggestion: use singular for the specific dream, ensure subject and verb agree, and prefer 'a lot of money.'

× So that time I was very young and I just keep this ambition.

✓ At that time I was very young and I just kept this ambition.

Tense inconsistency: 'was' sets past narrative so 'keep' should be past 'kept' (Grammar ID 5). Also 'so that time' should be 'at that time' (preposition use, Grammar ID 11). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past events and use correct preposition 'at.'

× And I have never shared my dream with others but I had a vulnerable hearts on my dream.

✓ I have never shared my dream with others, but I felt vulnerable about it.

Mixed tenses and wrong noun forms: 'I have never shared' (present perfect) is okay for life experience, then 'but I had' mixes past simple unnecessarily; use 'felt' or 'have felt' for clarity (Grammar IDs 6 and 5). 'a vulnerable hearts' is wrong number and article—use singular 'felt vulnerable' and preposition 'about' instead of 'on' (Grammar IDs 1, 22, 11). Suggestion: use 'felt vulnerable about it' to express emotional state correctly.

× Later on. I interested in being a in musicians because I love playing the violin.

✓ Later on, I became interested in being a musician because I love playing the violin.

Sentence fragments and missing verb: 'I interested' lacks auxiliary/verb; should be 'I became interested' (Grammar ID 23 and 6). 'a in musicians' has wrong article, preposition and pluralization; use 'a musician' (Grammar IDs 1, 11, 22). Suggestion: use 'became interested in being a musician.'

× So I plan to be my idols in the future like him.

✓ So I plan to be like my idol in the future.

Pronoun and noun number: 'my idols' (plural) conflicts with 'him' singular, and 'be my idol' is incorrect—one cannot 'be' one's idol; better 'be like my idol' or 'become like him.' Use singular 'idol' and place 'like' correctly (Grammar IDs 12 and 26). Suggestion: 'be like my idol' or 'become like him.'

× Yes, dream definitely have special meanings because dream is like something that that can inspire you, can encourage you when you're during your dog pass, when you set up a dream, you will keep up keeping achieving it and you'll probe.

✓ Yes, dreams definitely have special meanings because a dream can inspire and encourage you when you are going through difficult times. When you set a dream, you will keep trying to achieve it and you will progress.

Several issues: subject-verb agreement and article use—'dream' should be plural 'dreams' with 'have' or use singular with article 'a dream' (Grammar IDs 27 and 22). Redundant 'that that' removed. 'can inspire you, can encourage you' can be streamlined. 'you're during your dog pass' is unclear; likely 'going through difficult times' (word choice and preposition, Grammar ID 11). 'keep up keeping achieving it' mixes forms; use 'keep trying to achieve it' (verb+ -ing form issue, Grammar ID 8). 'you'll probe' is incorrect word choice; use 'progress.' Suggestion: simplify sentence, ensure agreement and use clear expressions for struggles and persistence.

× Yes, absolutely. I think everybody wants to make the dream control, because after the dream come come true, they will have a better life and a better economy situation.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I think everybody wants to make their dreams come true, because after a dream comes true they will have a better life and a better economic situation.

Collocation and article errors: 'make the dream control' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'make dreams come true' or 'make their dreams come true' (Grammar IDs 26 and 22). Repetition 'come come' is a typo. Subject-pronoun agreement: use 'their dreams' for general 'everybody' (Grammar ID 12). 'a better economy situation' should be 'a better economic situation' (adjective form and article, Grammar IDs 13 and 22). Also 'dream comes' needs third person singular 'comes' (Grammar ID 2). Suggestion: use the idiom 'make dreams come true' and 'economic situation.'

× Umm. So I think the most thing I want to do is achieve my dream in the future and I will be very rich, very, very powerful.

✓ So I think the main thing I want to do is achieve my dream in the future, and I hope I will be very rich and very powerful.

Word choice and register: 'the most thing' should be 'the main thing' or 'the most important thing' (Grammar ID 13). 'I will be very rich, very, very powerful' is grammatically possible but sounds overly certain; 'I hope I will' is more natural when expressing desire (modal verb usage, Grammar ID 4). Suggestion: use 'the main/most important thing' and soften certainty with 'hope' or 'want to.'