Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetition. Also correct sentence fragments and grammar (e.g., “When I have a bad dream, I often wake up and then forget it”).

Ejemplo: I can remember some dreams, but not all of them. Typically, it depends on how deeply I slept; for example, if I sleep lightly I remember dreams more clearly. However, when I have a bad dream I often wake up suddenly and quickly forget the details.

Sugerencia: Organize your response: give a direct answer then one or two specific supporting points connected with linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct repetitions. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “I enjoy discussing dreams because…”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends and they tell me theirs. I enjoy these conversations because they are interesting and sometimes reveal how we feel; for instance, a friend’s recurring dream helped us discuss stress and sleep habits.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion then briefly justify it with clear reasoning and one specific example. Avoid religious repetition that breaks fluency; link ideas with words like “because” or “so”. Correct unclear phrases (e.g., “bad or dead dream” unclear).

Ejemplo: No, I don't think most dreams have special meanings because I see them as random brain activity during sleep. For example, after a stressful day I might dream about being late, which seems more like stress processing than a prediction.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and expand with a clear plan or example using linking words. Reduce repetition and uncertain phrasing; explain which dreams and how you plan to achieve them. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Ejemplo: Yes, I want some of my dreams to come true, especially career goals. For instance, I hope to become a teacher, so I am studying education and taking internships to gain experience, and I believe this will help make that dream a reality.

× Sometimes, but sometimes not.

✓ Sometimes I remember them, but sometimes I do not.

The original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb for the second clause, causing ambiguity. Use a full present simple construction 'I remember them' and contrast with 'I do not' to match the present-tense context and make the meaning explicit.

× It depends on how I slept.

✓ It depends on how I sleep.

The speaker is referring to a habitual condition, so present simple ('sleep') is appropriate rather than past tense ('slept'). Using present simple keeps tense consistent with habitual statements.

× So, uh, usually I remember, not the bad ones.

✓ So, usually I remember my dreams, but not the bad ones.

The original has a misplaced comma and missing object. Adding 'my dreams' clarifies what is remembered and joining with 'but' correctly contrasts good and bad dreams.

× I usually when I have a bad dream, wake up and forget them.

✓ Usually, when I have a bad dream, I wake up and forget it.

Pronoun agreement and word order are incorrect. 'Usually' should precede the clause; include subject 'I' before 'wake up' and use singular pronoun 'it' to refer to 'a bad dream.' This corrects subject-verb order and pronoun agreement.

× I usually do both tell my friends my dreams and they're they're telling me theirs which is quite interesting.

✓ I usually do both: tell my friends my dreams and listen to them tell me theirs, which is quite interesting.

Sentence structure is jumbled and contains repetition. Using a colon and parallel verbs ('tell' and 'listen') creates a clear structure. 'They're they're telling me theirs' is redundant; replace with 'listen to them tell me theirs.' This fixes verb form and clarity.

× Sometimes when I hear theirs their dreams so and I like to ex express my feelings about my dreams as well.

✓ Sometimes when I hear their dreams, I like to express my feelings about my own dreams as well.

There is repetition and misplaced words ('theirs their', 'ex express', 'so'). Remove duplicates, correct word order, and add 'my own' for clarity.

× Uh, I don't think so.

✓ Uh, I do not think so.

Contraction is acceptable in speech but for clarity and formality use full 'do not.' This aligns with the test's expected clarity; grammatically both are correct, so change is stylistic.

× So, uh, I believe in God, that God. Controls everything so I don't have to get worried about any dream, bad or dead dream.

✓ I believe in God; God controls everything, so I do not have to worry about any dream, bad or otherwise.

Original has punctuation errors and unclear phrase 'dead dream.' Replace with 'otherwise.' Use 'worry' rather than 'get worried' for a more natural construction and correct sentence punctuation.

× Yes, some of them.

✓ Yes, some of them I do want to come true.

Fragment lacks a verb and does not fully answer the question. Adding 'I do want to come true' completes the sentence and clarifies meaning in present tense.

× I really, really want them to come true if I had to.

✓ I really, really want them to come true if I have to work for them.

Original mixes present desire with past conditional 'if I had to' which is unclear. Clarify conditional meaning: if the speaker must work for them, use present/future-compatible phrasing 'if I have to' or rephrase to 'and I will if I have to.' This fixes tense consistency.

× The good ones.

✓ I mean the good ones.

Fragment lacks a verb; adding 'I mean' connects it to the previous sentence and clarifies reference.

× One of my dreams will come true soon, insha'allah.

✓ One of my dreams will come true soon, insha'Allah.

Minor punctuation/capitalization: 'insha'Allah' is commonly written 'insha'Allah' or 'Insha'Allah.' Capitalizing 'Allah' and standardizing the apostrophe makes the phrase correct and respectful; the future tense 'will come true' is appropriate.