Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答内容较丰富，但有多处语言错误、不自然表达和重复，逻辑也不够清晰。建议：1) 用现在、过去、将来时态明确区分童年和现在的梦想；2) 避免重复词（如“love, love”），注意词汇搭配（“MBA reporter”“Sinner”可能用词不准，应改为更合适的职业或角色）；3) 控制长度不超过5句，首句直接回答问题，后续用一两句补充具体细节并用连接词衔接；4) 注意语法（如“when I grow up during high school”应为“when I was in high school”）。

Ejemplo: Yes, I can. As a child, I dreamed of becoming a scientist so I could contribute to my country. Later, when I was in high school I became interested in journalism and briefly considered a career as a business reporter because I enjoyed economics. More recently, I have focused on music and hope to pursue that professionally.

Sugerencia: 回答情感真挚，用词有感染力，但存在重复（“my my”）和部分语法问题。建议：1) 首句直接回应问题并简洁说明对象（e.g. parents, friends）；2) 用连接词补充原因或具体例子（例如父母如何支持）；3) 修正语法（如“I wouldn't be like who I am today”改为“I wouldn't be who I am today”）；4) 控制句子数量并保持逻辑顺畅。

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually share my dreams with my parents because they have always supported me. For example, when I wanted to study music they helped me pay for lessons and encouraged me to perform, which gave me confidence.

Sugerencia: 回答观点明确且有解释，但开头犹豫词“Umm”应避免，表达可更精炼与具体。建议：1) 开头直接给出观点（Yes/No）并用一句话说明原因；2) 用一两个具体理由或例子说明观点；3) 使用连接词如“because”或“as”使逻辑更紧密；4) 避免重复词组（“more and more”可替换）。

Ejemplo: No, I don't think dreams have a mystical meaning; they are simply expressions of what we hope to become. As we gain experience and learn new things, our goals often change and gradually become more realistic.

Sugerencia: 回答展示了努力和成就，但存在双重否定错误（“nobody wouldn't”）和时态与搭配问题（“I've signed a company”应为“signed with a company”或“signed to a label”）。建议：1) 首句直接肯定并避免双重否定；2) 用连接词（for example, because）简要列举具体行动与成果；3) 注意动词时态与固定搭配；4) 控制句子数并保持简洁。

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. I am actively pursuing a music career: I write my own songs, produce tracks, and recently signed with a small label. As a result, I have released several songs that have received positive feedback from listeners.

× When I was a child, my dream was to become a scientist and make great contributions for my country.

✓ When I was a child, my dream was to become a scientist and make great contributions to my country.

介词使用错误：习惯搭配是 make contributions to someone/something，用 for 在这里不地道。建议记住固定搭配“make contributions to”。

× And when I grow up during high school, my dream is to become an MBA reporter.

✓ And when I grew up during high school, my dream was to become an MBA reporter.

时态错误：句中描述过去在高中时期的情况，应使用过去时。将 grow 改为 grew，dream 的谓语也用过去时一致。

× You know, I love, love basketball at that time, and now I dream of becoming a Sinner.

✓ You know, I loved basketball at that time, and now I dream of becoming a singer.

词汇与时态错误：一是时态应与“at that time”对应，用过去式 loved。二是单词拼写错误“Sinner”应为“singer”。此外不需要重复“love, love”。建议写作时注意拼写并和时间状语保持时态一致。

× Yes, every dream I had, I shared them all to my parents because they are really my my power.

✓ Yes, every dream I had I shared with my parents because they are really my power.

代词与介词错误：every dream（单数概念）后接代词时不应用复数 them，且动词搭配应为 share something with someone 而不是 share to。建议用“shared with my parents”并去掉多余的“my”。

× They support me for all these years and I wouldn't be like who I am today without them.

✓ They have supported me for all these years, and I wouldn't be who I am today without them.

时态与句子结构：表示从过去持续到现在的动作应用现在完成时 have supported。短语“be like who I am today”不自然，正确表达为“be who I am today”。建议使用现在完成时并简化从句结构。

× Umm no. It's just a simple wish of who we want to be in the future and it will change constantly as we grow up.

✓ Umm, no. It's just a simple wish about who we want to be in the future, and it changes constantly as we grow up.

时态与介词使用：wish 后面常用 about 引出内容而非 of；第二分句说明习惯性或规律性变化可用一般现在时 changes，而非 will change（更自然）。建议用 about 并用一般现在时表达经常性变化。

× We will get to know more and more things and dreams will become more and more connected to real life.

✓ We get to know more and more things and dreams become more and more connected to real life.

时态问题：表达随着成长的普遍事实，用一般现在时更自然（或也可用 will 表示将来，但上下文为一般事实，用一般现在时更恰当）。建议统一使用一般现在时来表达经常发生的情况。

× I mean, nobody wouldn't want their dreams come true.

✓ I mean, nobody wouldn't want their dreams to come true. (better: I mean, nobody wouldn't want their dreams to come true.)

情态与否定重复：原句含双重否定（nobody wouldn't）导致意义混乱，应为 nobody would not 或更自然的 nobody wouldn't。此外动词不定式需加 to：want something to happen。建议改为 "nobody would want their dreams not to come true" 或直接 "nobody wouldn't want their dreams to come true"，更清晰可用肯定句 "everyone would want their dreams to come true"。

× I love music and I'm working on it.

✓ I love music and I'm working on it.

句子本身语法正确，但上下文需注意代词 it 指代不明。建议明确表述为 "I'm working on my music" 以提高清晰度。

× I write my own songs and I'm learning to make music and I think I've done pretty well.

✓ I write my own songs, I'm learning to make music, and I think I've done pretty well.

标点与时态：句子语法总体可接受，但建议用逗号分隔并保持时态一致。"I've done pretty well" 指到目前为止的成就，用现在完成时是合适的。

× I've signed a company so far, so I've published lots of songs and I got good reputation.

✓ I've signed with a company so far, so I've published lots of songs and I've gotten a good reputation.

介词与时态错误：签约要用 signed with a company；后半句关于到目前为止的经历应使用现在完成时 have gotten（或 have gained）a good reputation，而非简单过去式 got。建议使用现在完成时来表示到现在为止的结果。