Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문법과 표현의 정확성을 높이고, 응답 구조를 명확히 하세요. 먼저 질문에 간단히 답한 뒤(주제문), 꿈의 변화에 대한 구체적인 예들과 시제를 일관되게 사용해 보충하세요. 또한 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 대명사 사용을 정확히 하세요. 예: 과거의 꿈과 현재의 꿈을 구분하여 말하고, 'teach her' 같은 모호한 표현을 고치세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I can remember many of my childhood dreams. For example, when I was younger I wanted to be a painter and later I considered becoming a fashion designer. Over time my interests changed, and at one point I even thought about becoming a teacher. These shifts reflect how my goals evolved as I learned more about myself.

Sugerencia: 의사 전달이 모호하고 논리적 연결이 약합니다. 이유를 분명히 설명하고 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 정리하세요. 'sharing means I have to be a bad person' 같은 어색한 표현은 교정하고, 관심 부족의 원인을 구체적으로 제시하세요.

Ejemplo: I usually don't share my personal dreams or ambitions with others because I prefer to keep them private until I make real progress. Also, I'm not very interested in other people's dreams unless they are close friends, because I focus more on my own goals.

Sugerencia: 의견은 분명하지만 표현이 어색하고 단어 선택이 부정확합니다. 연결어로 이유를 뒷받침하고, 'admire' 등 잘못된 단어를 고쳐 의미를 명확하게 하세요. 구체적인 예를 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe dreams often have special meaning because they reveal a person's desires and hopes. For instance, if someone dreams about helping others, it might motivate them to pursue a career in healthcare or volunteering in the future.

Sugerencia: 응답은 열의가 느껴지지만 문법(시제, 반복)과 문장 흐름을 다듬어야 합니다. 구체적으로 어떤 준비를 하는지(예: 시험, 자격증, 어학공부) 연결어로 설명하고 문장을 간결하게 정리하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, absolutely. My dream is to work as a nurse in the United States, so I am studying hard and preparing for the necessary exams and certifications. I am also improving my English to meet the language requirements and gain clinical experience where possible.

× I remember that I usually dream person, so I have a lot of dreams when I was a child.

✓ I remember that I usually dreamed about people, so I had a lot of dreams when I was a child.

'dream person' is incorrect collocation and 'person' should be plural 'people'. Also tense consistency: when referring to childhood use past tense 'dreamed' and 'had'. Use 'dream about' to indicate dreaming of someone; ensure plural agreement.'

× So I think it changed a lot time to time.

✓ So I think it changed a lot from time to time.

The phrase 'time to time' should be 'from time to time' to be idiomatic. 'Changed' can stay past tense if referring to past changes; 'I think' (present) plus 'it changed' is acceptable when reflecting on past change, but keeping 'from' fixes prepositional error.'

× One time I wanted to painter and designer and sometimes I want to teach her.

✓ At one time I wanted to be a painter and designer, and sometimes I wanted to teach.

Missing 'be' after 'wanted to' is incorrect verb structure. Use past tense 'wanted' consistently. 'Teach her' is unclear and likely unnecessary; use 'teach' or specify the object. Also 'painter and designer' should be connected by 'and' and parallel structure.'

× Actually I prefer do not sharing do not share my dreams or ambitions because sharing of my dreams means I have to be a bad person and I usually not that interested in others dream as well.

✓ Actually I prefer not to share my dreams or ambitions because sharing my dreams makes me feel vulnerable, and I am usually not that interested in others' dreams either.

'Prefer do not sharing do not share' is incorrect. Use 'prefer not to share' (correct infinitive after prefer). 'Sharing of my dreams' is awkward; use 'sharing my dreams'. 'Means I have to be a bad person' is ungrammatical and likely wrong meaning; 'makes me feel vulnerable' is a clearer phrasing. Use 'others' dreams' with possessive and 'either' for negative addition. Subject-verb agreement: 'sharing ... makes'.'

× Yes, I do believe dreams have special meaning for everyone because dreams are someone's desire and hope, so it can bring some good meanings and admire to do something in the future.

✓ Yes, I do believe dreams have special meanings for everyone because dreams are someone's desires and hopes, so they can inspire people to do something in the future.

Use plural 'meanings' to agree with 'dreams'. 'Someone's desire and hope' should be plural 'desires and hopes' or 'a person's desires and hopes'. Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'dreams' — use 'they'. 'Bring some good meanings and admire' is ungrammatical; 'inspire people' conveys intended meaning.'

× Yes, absolutely. And I have a dream that work work as a nurse in the United States.

✓ Yes, absolutely. And I have a dream to work as a nurse in the United States.

'Dream that work work' is ungrammatical and duplicated 'work'. Use 'a dream to work' or 'a dream of working'. Infinitive 'to work' or gerund 'working' are correct forms here.'

× So I pursue that goal and try to accomplish that studying hard.

✓ So I am pursuing that goal and trying to accomplish it by studying hard.

Use progressive 'am pursuing' and 'trying' for ongoing actions. 'Accomplish that studying hard' is incorrect; use 'accomplish it by studying hard'. Ensure correct pronoun 'it' refers to the goal.'

× So I really wanted to.

✓ So I really want to.

Context is present desire; use present tense 'want' rather than past 'wanted'. If referring to past, earlier sentences should reflect tense consistently. Here, because the speaker is actively pursuing the goal, present tense is appropriate.'