Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and unclear pronouns, and use one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms and pronouns (e.g., “some have already come true”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I can remember some of my dreams. For example, a few childhood ambitions have already come true, while others are still in progress, and I’m working on them step by step.

Sugerencia: Give a direct reason first and follow with one specific example. Reduce fillers (uh, maybe) and use linking words (because, so, for example). Correct subject-verb agreement and tense (e.g., “which could make me fail”).

Ejemplo: No, I usually don’t share my dreams because I worry that people’s criticism or gossip might discourage me. For example, once I told a classmate about a project idea and their negative comments made me lose motivation.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and explain with a clear reason. Remove hesitations and repeat words. Use linking words (especially, because) and be specific about what you mean by “special meanings.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings, especially childhood dreams, because they often reflect a person’s true passions and values and many of them guide future choices.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two concrete supporting details about how you plan to achieve them. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., “I want all of them to come true”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I do want to make my dreams come true. For instance, I set specific goals and timelines for each dream and I’m taking courses to build the skills I need.

× Yes, I I remember some of my dreams, however some already been achieved while the others still in progress. If she can fulfill and achieve all my dreams.

✓ Yes, I remember some of my dreams; however, some have already been achieved while others are still in progress. I hope I can fulfill and achieve all my dreams.

Issues: 1) Repeated word 'I I' — remove duplicate. 2) 'some already been achieved' is missing auxiliary 'have' (Present perfect) — use 'have been achieved'. This fits because it describes past actions with present relevance. 3) 'the others still in progress' needs a verb and should be 'others are still in progress'. 4) 'If she can fulfill...' is ungrammatical and contextually wrong pronoun 'she' and conditional. Intended meaning is a wish or hope about the speaker; change to 'I hope I can fulfill...' or 'I hope to fulfill...'. Suggestions: keep subject-verb agreement, use appropriate auxiliary verbs for perfect tenses, and choose correct pronouns and sentence structure to express hope.

× No, I don't because uh, if I tell anyone about my dream then I might not be able to achieve it and sometimes maybe they will talk a lot about it and uh, which will eventually makes me fail.

✓ No, I don't, because if I tell anyone about my dream, I might not be able to achieve it, and sometimes they might talk a lot about it, which will eventually make me fail.

Issues: 1) Redundant fillers 'uh' and 'maybe' can be reduced for clarity. 2) 'then' after 'if' is unnecessary in English conditional clauses. 3) Mixed modals: use 'might' consistently for possibility. 4) 'they will talk...' is acceptable, but maintain consistent modal: 'they might talk...'. 5) 'which will eventually makes me fail' has subject-verb disagreement: 'makes' should be 'make' after 'which will eventually' or better 'will eventually make'. Suggestions: remove redundant words, use consistent modal verbs, and ensure verb agrees with its subject.

× Yes, I do think so, especially the the one that, uh, being dreamed when someone is a child, as a child, because those dreams are pure and usually they will be fulfilled.

✓ Yes, I do think so, especially the ones dreamed when someone is a child, because those dreams are pure and are often fulfilled.

Issues: 1) Duplicate 'the the' — remove duplicate. 2) 'the one that ... being dreamed' is incorrect; use past or passive reduced relative clause: 'ones dreamed' or 'ones that are dreamed'. 'Being dreamed' is awkward and incorrect here. 3) 'when someone is a child, as a child' is redundant; keep 'when someone is a child' or 'as a child'. 4) 'usually they will be fulfilled' is better as 'are often fulfilled' to state a general truth (present simple). Suggestions: avoid redundant words, use correct reduced relative clauses for passive meaning, and choose appropriate tense for general statements.

× Yes I do. I want to all of them to be fulfilled and achieved because as I told you, those old dreams are pure and sometimes they are the the one that needs to be fulfilled.

✓ Yes, I do. I want all of them to be fulfilled and achieved because, as I told you, those old dreams are pure and sometimes they are the ones that need to be fulfilled.

Issues: 1) 'I want to all of them' — incorrect word order; correct is 'I want all of them' or 'I want them all'. 2) Duplicate 'the the' — remove duplicate. 3) 'the one that needs to be fulfilled' should agree in number with 'dreams' so use plural 'the ones that need to be fulfilled'. 4) Use simple present 'need' for general statement. Suggestions: use correct word order for objects, ensure pronoun/phrase number agreement, and remove duplicate words.