Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent: give a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and avoid repetition and fragmented clauses. Use linking words (for example, 'usually' or 'however') correctly and fix tense/grammar errors. Aim for 3–4 sentences only.

Ejemplo: Yes, I can remember some of my dreams, especially the vivid or emotionally intense ones. Usually I forget most dreams shortly after waking, but long or particularly meaningful dreams tend to stay with me. For example, I often remember dreams that involve important people or strong emotions.

Sugerencia: Clarify tense and streamline the response: start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain when and why you share dreams, using a linking word like 'however' to show contrast. Provide a specific example to make it more concrete.

Ejemplo: I sometimes share my dreams with others, especially when they involve people I know. However, I'm not generally interested in other people's dreams unless there is a curious or relevant detail. For instance, I once told a friend about a dream that included his new job because it seemed connected to his recent worries.

Sugerencia: Provide a balanced, well-structured opinion: give a clear topic sentence stating your view, then use linking words ('however', 'on the other hand') to contrast. Reduce fillers ('uh', 'it's') and correct grammar. Add a brief specific example or reason to support your view.

Ejemplo: I think dreams can sometimes carry special meanings related to our daily life. However, many dreams are simply expressions of the subconscious and not literal messages. For example, dreaming about exams might reflect anxiety rather than a prediction.

Sugerencia: Separate ambition (goals) from nighttime dreams clearly: start with a clear statement about goals, then contrast with sleeping dreams using a linking word like 'whereas' or 'however'. Remove redundancy and correct grammar (e.g., 'I work hard every day to achieve them'). Provide a concrete example of a goal you are pursuing.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have ambitions I actively try to make come true, and I work hard every day to reach them. However, the dreams I have while sleeping are different and often unrelated to my goals. For instance, I'm saving and studying to become a graphic designer, which is a goal I hope to achieve.

× Yes, I do remember some of the dreams I had, but there are a lot a lot of a dream where I actually forgot as soon as I wake up.

✓ Yes, I do remember some of the dreams I had, but there are a lot of dreams that I actually forget as soon as I wake up.

The student mixed past reference with present-tense verbs. 'Forgot' is past tense while the general habit 'as soon as I wake up' requires present tense 'forget' to indicate a recurring action. Also redundancies and word order were adjusted: 'a lot a lot of a dream' is ungrammatical and should be 'a lot of dreams' or 'many dreams.' Use present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use present simple for habits (I forget), and simplify 'a lot of dreams'.

× But usually the long or the most affected dreams on my subconscious, these are the ones that I remember the most.

✓ But usually the long or most vivid dreams in my subconscious are the ones I remember the most.

Original has fragmented structure and incorrect preposition 'on' plus awkward adjective 'affected.' 'These are the ones' creates a comma splice. Correct structure uses 'are' to link subject and complement and 'in my subconscious' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Most vivid' better conveys prominence than 'most affected.' Suggestion: Keep single clause with subject + verb + complement and choose appropriate adjective and preposition.

× Obviously we forgot more than we remember, especially when.

✓ Obviously we forget more than we remember, especially upon waking.

'Forgot' is past tense but the statement is a general truth about memory; therefore present simple 'forget' is required. The fragment 'especially when.' is incomplete; clarify with 'especially upon waking.' Suggestion: For general truths use present simple and avoid sentence fragments.

× When there are details that are related to other people, I tended to share these details with them and share their dreams with them.

✓ When there are details related to other people, I tend to share these details with them and hear about their dreams.

The student used 'tended' (past) but context implies a habitual present action, so 'tend' is correct. Also 'that are related to' can be reduced to 'related to.' Repeating 'share' awkward; changed second part to 'hear about' to reflect the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× But I'm not usually interested in people's dreams unless there are some details that could interest me as well.

✓ But I'm not usually interested in people's dreams unless there are details that interest me as well.

'Could interest' implies conditional possibility; context describes typical preference so simple present 'interest' is clearer. 'Some details' can be shortened to 'details.' Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual preferences and simplify phrases.

× Yes, sometimes can have a special meaning or a special message to our daily life.

✓ Yes, sometimes dreams can have a special meaning or a message for our daily life.

Missing subject before 'can have' (should be 'dreams can have'). Also 'message to our daily life' is better as 'message for our daily life.' Added 'dreams' to clarify subject. Suggestion: Ensure each clause has an explicit subject and use 'message for' rather than 'message to.'

× However, also a big portion of dreams are just real, uh, results of our subconscious mind.

✓ However, a large portion of dreams are just the results of our subconscious mind.

Word order and article use: 'also a big portion' is awkward; 'a large portion' is more natural. 'Just real, uh, results' is redundant; 'just the results' suffices. 'Results' should take definite article 'the' when specifying the subconscious output. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases and include articles with specific results.

× It's it's way to express so we shouldn't pay much attention or should be obsessed about it.

✓ It's its way of expressing itself, so we shouldn't pay too much attention or become obsessed with it.

Confused 'It's it's' and incorrect pronoun use. 'It's' (it is) vs 'its' (possessive) were mixed. Proper reflexive structure uses 'expressing itself.' Also 'pay much attention or should be obsessed about it' is awkward; corrected to 'pay too much attention or become obsessed with it.' Suggestion: Distinguish 'it's' and 'its', use reflexive pronouns where needed, and use natural collocations ('become obsessed with').

× But uh, sometimes yes has a special meaning.

✓ But sometimes, yes, they have a special meaning.

Missing subject and number agreement: 'yes has' is incorrect. 'Dreams' (they) is implied, so use 'they have.' Also maintain plural to match 'dreams.' Suggestion: Explicitly include or agree pronouns with the intended noun.

× I have dreams that I want to come true, which I work hard every day to achieve them.

✓ I have dreams that I want to come true, which I work hard every day to achieve.

Redundant object 'them' after a relative clause; the clause already refers to 'dreams.' Also 'work hard every day to achieve' is correct present habitual action. Removing 'them' fixes sentence structure. Suggestion: Avoid redundant pronouns after relative clauses (do not repeat 'them').

× But the dreams that I dream when I'm sleeping, it depends because there are also a lot of dreams where I don't like them.

✓ But the dreams I have while sleeping depend; there are also many dreams that I do not like.

Original mixes clauses and uses 'it depends' with no clear subject. 'The dreams that I dream when I'm sleeping' is wordy; 'dreams I have while sleeping' is natural. Avoid repeating pronoun 'them' with 'dreams.' Use present simple for habitual occurrence. Suggestion: Simplify relative clauses, ensure subject-verb alignment ('dreams...depend'), and avoid redundant pronouns.