Part 1
Examinador
Can you remember the dreams you had?
Candidato
Yes, I remember it. I dream to study abroad for one year at Royal College of Art, studying the contemporary art practice and I had an offer from this college.
Examinador
Do you share your dreams with others? (or are you interested in others' dreams?)
Candidato
Yes, I share it with my close friends and teachers. They also support me to go further. They think this a good experience to improve my other skills.
Examinador
Do you think dreams have special meanings?
Candidato
Yes, I think dreams often have special means because they can represent a good imagination to life and they can also bring emotional value for some people because they bring a sense of happiness and enjoyment.
Examinador
Do you want to make your dreams come true?
Candidato
Yes, I do study abroad for one year is my biggest dream. One was a child, I had the dream and now I received an offer and I just passed the language test. I will come to this a dream.
Can you remember the dreams you had?
Puntuación: 68.0Sugerencia: 回答要更自然、语法更准确,并保持简洁。可把话分为主题句和补充句,使用正确时态与冠词,避免冗长。比如先说能记得梦境的总体印象,再具体说明关于留学的梦。可在句间使用连接词如“so”或“and”使表达更连贯。
Ejemplo: Yes, I can usually remember my dreams. One of my main dreams is to study at the Royal College of Art for a year to focus on contemporary art practice, and I’ve even received an offer.
Do you share your dreams with others? (or are you interested in others' dreams?)
Puntuación: 75.0Sugerencia: 回答可以更具体,说明与谁分享、他们如何支持和具体能提升哪些技能。使用连接词(for example, so, which)使信息更连贯,注意小语法错误如时态和冠词。
Ejemplo: Yes, I share my dream with close friends and a few teachers, and they’ve been very supportive. For example, a teacher gave me advice on portfolio preparation, which helped me improve my practical and communication skills.
Do you think dreams have special meanings?
Puntuación: 64.0Sugerencia: 表达要更准确、简洁,避免重复和拼写/用词错误(means→meaning)。可以先给直接观点,再用一两句举例或解释。用连接词(because, for instance)让逻辑清晰。
Ejemplo: Yes, I think dreams often have special meaning because they reflect our imagination and emotions. For instance, a creative dream might inspire an artwork and give someone a sense of joy.
Do you want to make your dreams come true?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: 回答需更有条理,注意语法和句子衔接。先明确回答,然后交代过去的努力与现在的进展,最后说明未来计划。避免不连贯或重复的短句。
Ejemplo: Yes, studying abroad for a year is my biggest dream. I have wanted this since I was a child, and now I’ve received an offer and passed the language test, so I plan to go next year.
× Yes, I remember it.
✓ Yes, I remember them.
原句中“it”用作指代“dreams(复数)”不正确。因为“dreams”是复数,代词应使用“them”。建议将代词与被指代名词的数保持一致。
× I dream to study abroad for one year at Royal College of Art, studying the contemporary art practice and I had an offer from this college.
✓ I dream of studying abroad for one year at the Royal College of Art, studying contemporary art practice, and I have received an offer from that college.
(1)动词“dream”后面常接介词“of”加动名词,故使用“dream of studying”。(2)“study abroad for one year”改为“studying abroad for one year”以匹配动名词结构。 (3)学校名前通常加定冠词“the Royal College of Art”。(4)“studying the contemporary art practice”中定冠词和名词搭配不自然,改为“studying contemporary art practice”。(5)时态:“I had an offer”用现在完成“have received/received”更符合上下文中刚获得录取通知的语境,建议用现在完成时“have received”。所有建议有助于语法和表达更自然。
× Yes, I share it with my close friends and teachers.
✓ Yes, I share them with my close friends and teachers.
“it”错误指代复数“dreams”,应使用复数代词“them”。代词的人称和数要与所指对象一致。
× They also support me to go further.
✓ They also support me in going further.
动词“support”后接表示帮助的动词时常用介词结构“support someone in doing something”或直接用不定式结构“help someone to do something”。这里用“support me in going further”更自然,或改为“help me go further”。
× They think this a good experience to improve my other skills.
✓ They think this is a good experience to improve my other skills.
缺少系动词“is”。此外“other skills”可理解但若想表达“其他技能”是正确的;此处主要错误为漏掉“is”,属于句子结构/系动词问题,需补上“is”使句子完整。
× Yes, I think dreams often have special means because they can represent a good imagination to life and they can also bring emotional value for some people because they bring a sense of happiness and enjoyment.
✓ Yes, I think dreams often have special meanings because they can represent imagination in life, and they can also bring emotional value to some people by giving a sense of happiness and enjoyment.
(1)“means”用错,语境中应为“meanings”(意义)。(2)“represent a good imagination to life”搭配不当,改为“represent imagination in life”更自然。 (3)“bring emotional value for some people”改为“bring emotional value to some people”介词用法更准确。总体调整使表达更地道、语法正确。
× Yes, I do study abroad for one year is my biggest dream.
✓ Yes, studying abroad for one year is my biggest dream.
句子结构错误。不能同时用助动词“do”和不带动词的名词性结构。表达“……是我的最大梦想”时应使用动名词短语作为主语,故改为“Studying abroad for one year is my biggest dream.”
× One was a child, I had the dream and now I received an offer and I just passed the language test.
✓ When I was a child, I had that dream, and now I have received an offer and have just passed the language test.
(1)“One was a child”不自然,应为“When I was a child”。(2)“the dream”如果指之前提到的梦想,用“that dream”更清楚。(3)时态混用:描述过去的童年用过去时“had”,而“now I received an offer”应使用现在完成时“have received”表示与现在相关的过去经历;“I just passed the language test”也建议使用现在完成“have just passed”。这样时态一致且语义清晰。
× I will come to this a dream.
✓ I will make this dream come true.
原句结构混乱且短语“come to this a dream”错误。常用表达是“make a dream come true”,意为“实现梦想”。因此改为“I will make this dream come true.”以符合英语习惯。