Dreams— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., “Yes, I can remember my dreams.”). Avoid unrelated phrases like “Such a beautiful question” and correct grammar (e.g., “I remember a dream about becoming a teacher”). Provide one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I can remember my dreams. For example, I often dream about becoming a teacher because I have a strong passion for teaching. I like helping others improve their skills, and in my dream I see myself working with students in a classroom.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and clarity. Use a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I share my dreams with others, especially my parents”). Use correct verb forms and prepositions (“share my dreams with”, “help me by guiding me”). Remove fillers like “umm” and make supporting detail specific and concise. Use a linking word like “because” or “for example.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I share my dreams with others, especially my parents, because they guide and support me. For example, I told them I want to be a teacher so they help me choose the right courses and activities to prepare for that career.

Sugerencia: Clarify your main idea and fix grammar. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings”). Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Explain why with a clear reason and a short example, using linking words like “because” or “so”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because they often reflect our hopes and goals. For instance, if someone dreams of helping others, it may show they value kindness and want a career that makes a difference.

Sugerencia: Good direct answer and clear motivation. Improve grammar (plural/singular agreement and article use) and avoid wordiness. Keep within five sentences by keeping supporting details concise and using linking words like “because” and “so”. Add one specific plan or example to make the answer more concrete.

Ejemplo: Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true because I aim to become a successful teacher. For example, I plan to complete a teaching certification and volunteer in schools so I can develop classroom skills and then pass on discipline and teamwork to my students.

× I've remembered the trip I've had which is being a teacher.

✓ I remember the dream I had about becoming a teacher.

The original sentence mixes present perfect ('I've remembered', 'I've had') awkwardly with a time-specific dream. Use simple present 'I remember' to state a memory and 'had' to reference a specific dream. Also 'being a teacher' should be 'becoming a teacher' to express aspiration. Suggestion: use 'I remember the dream I had about becoming a teacher.'

× I always wanted to be a teacher because I have a strong passion to teach other people and show them how to grow their skills.

✓ I have always wanted to be a teacher because I have a strong passion for teaching other people and showing them how to develop their skills.

Use 'have always wanted' for continuity to present. 'Passion to teach' is less natural than 'passion for teaching'. 'Show them how to grow their skills' should be 'showing them how to develop their skills' for correct collocation and gerund after 'passion for'.

× I've always shared my dream to others, especially my parents because they always help me to guidance my dream what I want to be in the future.

✓ I've always shared my dream with others, especially my parents, because they always help guide my dreams and support what I want to be in the future.

Use 'shared my dream with' (correct preposition). 'Help me to guidance' is incorrect: use 'help guide' or 'help me to pursue' and 'guidance' (noun) doesn't fit there. 'What I want to be in the future' is awkward; 'what I want to be in the future' can be simplified to 'what I want to become.' Use gerunds/infinitives correctly.

× For an example, I wanted to be a teacher so that I can umm, deliver my knowledge so that I can help future generation to be good.

✓ For example, I wanted to be a teacher so that I can share my knowledge and help future generations become better.

Use 'For example' not 'For an example.' 'Deliver my knowledge' is unnatural; 'share my knowledge' is better. 'Future generation' should be plural 'future generations.' 'Help ... to be good' is vague — 'help future generations become better' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do think dream has a special meaning because I I always think that dream is making someone who feel like themselves because everyone wanted their dreams right?

✓ Yes, I do think a dream has a special meaning because I always think that a dream helps someone feel like themselves; everyone wants their dreams, right?

Use articles: 'a dream' not 'dream'. 'I I' has duplication. 'Dream is making someone who feel' is ungrammatical; use 'a dream helps someone feel like themselves.' 'Everyone wanted their dreams' should be 'everyone wants their dreams' to match present general statement. Add a comma or semicolon before 'right?'.

× So I think people has to achieve and get what they want in the future.

✓ So I think people have to achieve and get what they want in the future.

Subject 'people' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have,' not 'has.' Keep 'achieve and get what they want' — could also be 'achieve what they want.'

× I've always believed that great result come from discipline and teamwork, and I want to deliver the same value to my students so that I can help them to grow their skills and push them to beyond their limit.

✓ I've always believed that great results come from discipline and teamwork, and I want to pass on the same values to my students so that I can help them develop their skills and push them beyond their limits.

Use plural 'results' and 'values' for general statements. 'Deliver the same value' is awkward; 'pass on the same values' fits better. 'Help them to grow their skills' should be 'help them develop their skills.' 'Push them to beyond their limit' is ungrammatical: use 'push them beyond their limits.'